(58) Breathe The Rain

If you breathe the rain
You can smell my tears
When you live the pain
Then you feel my fears

Please close the door
Keeping the World out
Push my mouth to the floor
So I can no longer shout

The window is smashed
Someone had to throw a stone
My spirit has been dashed
It has left me all alone

I know I make no sense
My mind is in a different place
All of this bitter pretence
Has disappeared without a trace

All work with no chance to play
Leaves you going a little bit insane
Clouds are here because the Sun went away
So all you can do now is breathe the rain

copyright Chris Smith 2010 (somewhere in a room in my mind)

Reviews

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

Rain is so symbolic of many things. The tears, fears and feelings of loneliness.
Wandering minds take us on many journeys to many places.
This is an emotional poem .. I think many of us have felt this .. i know i have.
Wanting to be alone.. screaming in vain .. and this is how i feel- as you wrote it.
Love the last couplet.

Chloe

[Murtuza]

Fantastic imagery used. I like this poem :)

[Tasha]

This was amazing.

[Lilly Negoi]

the first stanza is quite a killer :)...