(53) Queen Of Spades

Tasting a love that is forbidden,

I surrender to her dark touch.

Knowing that temptation has won.

 

She is called the Queen of spades,

And she is playing with my heart.

I am going to lose the game.

 

I thought I was the one in control,

But I was placed under her spell.

A man can never win against beauty.

 

You play with the cards you are dealt,

A victim where you can never bluff.

When you know the odds are against you.

 

The Queen of spades makes the rules,

Where she will take all you have.

The final price will always be your soul.

 

I am one of many that was her prize,

Because she plays the game too well.

In darkest passion, you can never win.

Author's Note

This is a new one written here first.

Reviews

[M.Babu]

"She is called the Queen of spades,
And she is playing with my heart."
I just have to state that i really understood this line. Queen of spades and your heart? Wow that was so damn creative right there:)


i love the comparison to a game of cards. You've really bluffed your way through this piece! Awesome thought behind it! Good one

[HB]

I like it. I'm a little bit addicted to anything even slightly Alice. ^.^

[fargone]

hmmmm, i think i've met her chris....or someone very like her, lol. a great write, this one. it tells the story quite simply, which i think is always more effective. excellent.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Oh! A good one! :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

What a wonderful write, Chris. Reminds me of my "The Card Game" poem. Them spades are something else.. so wicked.. so in need of victory, to be right and to win. I love the flow of this one and the meaning behind it.

[SpokenWord]

I know this person, or someone like her. I too was under that spell but she took advantage one too many times and now I am awake and playing a new game of chess with her instead of a card game that can be rigged to benefit one. I relate to this write so I think it is outstanding.

[sushi]

Great lines....
"I am one of many that was her prize,
Because she plays the game too well.
In darkest passion, you can never win."

[Sukriti Suki]

I read this twice....I think this piece needs to be darker in some areas.

But ' A man can never win against beauty' and ' In darkest passion, you can never win' are some great lines!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

awesome, very cool. i like it

[Ashley]

another beautifully crafted piece. the dynamic between game playing and relationship is certainly not a new concept, but you make it fresh and interesting here. very well written.