(41) Pizza Of Life

First we take the base.
Our foundation of life.
We spread it with happiness.
And we then add our toppings.
With a sprinkle of hope.
A little bit of joy.
A gathering of desire.
Maybe a splashing of caring.
Finished off with plenty of love.
Then we place the pizza in the oven.
To be baked by the sands of time.
Take it out and allow it to cool.
You can now taste the pizza of life.
All you have to do is to enjoy.

copyright Chris Smith 2010

Reviews

[Emily]

First,I would combine the first two lines.It would flow more that way.And on the 5th line, I would erase the 'with'.I think that 'lashing has more of a negative connotation,so I'd replace it with dash or some other word of that sort.Other than that,I like it. It has a fun tone,and your metaphors are good with the rest of the poem.Good job!

[Ravyne Hawke]

Chris, as always a delightful poem. I love the idea of life being a pizza. One bump in the road.. "lashing of caring" lashing is more of an angry word what about "splashing"

[Lily Mae]

Thats a great life motto to live by :) xx

[Arabdha]

Smart use of metaphor.Life does seem like a pizza when you put it like this.I liked it:)

[White Ink]

*smiles* well i bet we all enjoyed your pizza recipe.. n i loved my share of bite!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love the analogy especially since I love pizza~ =)~ and how very true indeed it is of us and our cultivation of life's garden here on earth~

[LA Lorena]

I like the concept of this, life being like a pizza. Kind of makde me think of that Forrest Gump movie, and the quote "life is like a box of chocolates"

[sid......]

superb.tells dat life is so good.its v who burn da pizza in da oven due to our carelessness...

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love, Love the imagery and meaning of this poem! Great Job!

[MuSe Ampoule]

cute write, just don't burn the crust. :)

[abby2011]

not bad