The Stars

We alone are one of many,

Spread across a world

Of vast diversity.

Connected by an unseen bond,

Beautiful creations

Of one superior entity.

Far above in the heavens,

The stars give off their light.

We are not so different from them.

So many it is impossible to count

But the moon watches them all

Great guardian of the night.

Reviews

[LawrenceRaybon]

Beautiful poem, I love the connection you draw between Stars/People and Moon/Supreme Being.

I usually try to offer constructive criticism, but with this poem it's difficult as it is so well written. One thing I will mention though, I love the metaphor you use but with a slight shift in perspective it has strange implications:

Stars are each a sun unto themselves and only seem small because of their distance. As such, each star is actually far larger than the moon, so we end up with star > moon, and by the logic of the metaphor that would mean each person > supreme being.

I realize this is not the intended meaning, and I doubt many will draw the above conclusion. I also don't feel any changes are necessary. This is just a heads up as to one of the (possibly unintended) ways the poem can be taken.

Again, beautiful poem! I look forward to reading your other work!

Cheers,
Lawrence

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[Amber Weldon]

Thank you! and thank you for your input, I am eager to grow in my writing and I love when others give me their full honesty, thank you.

[Innocent]

beautifully written and nice rhythm.

[Amber Weldon]

Thank you!

[StrixNebulosa]

This is quite soothing, I like that you show your nature in this as you give credit where it is due.I find the moon to be stunning and beautiful, yet its light is not its own... it reminds me of us, as too we are reflections of a greater source.

[Amber Weldon]

so true, thank you

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[Amber Weldon]

Thank you! :)

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