Scarlet

Scarlet

A Poem by LoLo
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I was walking my friends dog and the night inspired me to revel inside of it's ebony arms :)

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Scarlet night

Amber dust glows

Spirits harness flight

To galaxies unknown


Star dazzled crush

Moon flower passion

Embered twilight hush

The day turned ashen


Crystal fire-flies

Rejoice in wavered sprees

Sodalite  skies

Illuminate the sea


 Omniscient allure

Enchanting mortals

A sour mind's cure

The cold heart's portal

 

 

© 2009 LoLo


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I'm a big fan of walking at night too. I thought you used some wonderful images in this, that gave the reader a great sensation. Good job.

Posted 14 Years Ago


This is beautiful save for the few slight errors. The mood is very well displayed for this poem. Wonderful job!

Posted 15 Years Ago


How very lovely these words are.. it's as if you've painted a wonderful picture and hung it before your readers.

' Star dazzled crush ~ Moon flower passion ~ Embered twilight hush ~ The day turned ashen ', that is a stunning stanza, it has few words but they speak a million.

Wonderful.


Posted 15 Years Ago


I loved the words you used .. they hold there place well ..alot of passion this makes the poem a vsion in the mind.

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is so beautiful.I love your expressive language and imagery. You showed how beautiful and calming the night is in such a gorgeous way. I loved this.
Crystal fire-flies

Rejoice in wavered sprees

Sodalite skies

Illuminate the sea
^ that was my fave part. I love it.


Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So beautifully expressive and moving, you illuminate the night with your descriptive vibrance! So vivid and lifting, wrapping the reader in a scarlet light... Stunning!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very descriptive piece~well expressed and nicely penned~
Thanks for sharing

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this. I think "sodalite" should be "sodalist" since you are using the metaphor of the Catholic laity as a descriptive adjective here. Also, "omniscient" is misspelled; tiny flaws in a delightful piece. Kudos. And I do hope my constructive criticism will not be misconstrued as an insult. It seems a good many people on this site have never seen, let alone given, an honest and helpful review. I am all about the writing and how it may be improved as well as helping others achieve their full potential. Blessings of peace and love. :o) F.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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LoLo
LoLo

Appleton, WI



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