Cinquain

wordplay

An Example of  a Cinquain:

 

 

 

( A Winter Celebration)

 

Yuletide

green mistletoe

a kiss smile and a wink

cookie crumbs and a glass of milk

Christmas

 

 

 

Here I sandwiched in a Cinquain with 2 Tetractys

 

 

 

(a divine answer)

 

 

God

Young girl

Divine rape

The chosen child

Cuckold, betrayed; Joseph seeks an answer

 

Virgin

Grace and beauty

Golden light warm embrace

She lay on sanctified soil

Mary

 

Husband in name only; doing God’s work

The angels swore

Doubt no more

Have some

Faith

 

 

In this piece I did a Variation- a triple with some syllable alteration:

 

 

( The Heart is more than a muscle)


My Heart
missing a beat
a blood revolution
caught unawares by this vicious
Attack

Your Heart
in much distress
a great love turned sour
nothing but pain and one bad head
Ache

Our Hearts
once filled with love
now laid in waste and ruin
weak foundations just crumble and
Break

 

Author's Note

Cinquain- This is one of my favorite forms -

Cinquain is a short, usually unrhymed poem consisting of twenty-two syllables distributed
as 2, 4, 6, 8, 2, in five lines. It was developed by the Imagist poet, Adelaide Crapsey.
Another form, sometimes used by school teachers to teach grammar, is as follows:

Line 1: Noun
Line 2: Description of Noun
Line 3: Action
Line 4: Feeling or Effect
Line 5: Synonym of the initial noun.

Reviews

[Michael X]

wow, no less then brilliant bob, i could study the meaning and depth and feature that brings your words to life as only you can, I particlarly enjoyed the segmented pieces in version- the first christmas poem made the heart feel the warmth and holly of cheer, i could actually feel the spirit of the season in your words,
and the second poem added a mirrored reality to the emotion-cold and wintery; I'm blown away by the choice of descriptions you used, I dont know whether to chuckle a bit or be shocked, and the thrird variation proved your skill, as if there are many underlying, subconsious effects to the entirety, there are many ways to look at this and i look forward to returning and figuring, and breaking down the meaning.

[W.k.kortas]

Failure
to completely
accept Mary's chasteness
makes the local parish vicar
quite glum.

[Gheeneil]

Whoa! This is perfectly written. A Cinquain indeed. The first one (Winter Celebration) is carefully thought. The word choice and the form are coherent in theme. This is very creative. An excellent work!

[Katherine Wyatt]

Ok.. I am loving this.. You have done such an amazing job here...I use the tetractys in the double form a lot.. and this has really been not only beautiful but a wonderful example on how to utilize and intermingle these forms.. you have done this brilliantly!

[deeps]

Hey! I really like this form alot.
You are so amazing. I like this alot.

"The heart is more than a muscle"
LOVE IT! to very word you have written.

Well written writes here both of them.
You are amazing, I truly enjoy your writes
Now how do i get you to send them to me.