going dark

a haiku variation- the Japanese form does not use titles-this is a senryu but I use haiku as an umbrella term encompassing haiku, senryu and tanka

going dark

 

cotton-candy high---

sitting alone in a room

contemplating death

 

the edge of a blade

cuts the skin with gentle care---

clowns and acrobats

 

walking the tight rope

with sore feet and a headache-

barkers and strong-men

 

dispossessed of home

adrift in a joyless world---

jaws of a lion

 

a wonder-less world

of torn tents and empty trains---

virtual clown cars

the big top folds and unwinds

no one asked the elephants---

 

 

Author's Note

haiku or it variants do not use punctuation- the only punctuation used are for the cutting word. either a - ! or ;

Reviews

[Allison]

I really enjoyed the imagery here. It's intense and quite theatrical, which, I think, fits the subject matter.

[Robert Francis Callaci]

thank you for the read and review. This is a theatrical piece, the theater that is made up of circus performers and animals.

[mercy party]

to me this could be about depression and not being amused, calloused by distraction and ignored. The poem was uniquely put together and was vivid to say the least. cool.

[Robert Francis Callaci]

thank you for the read and review. This is indeed about depression, feeling displaced and ignored.The abrupt closing of Ringling Brothers and Barnum and Bailey. A way of life about to vanish. False and overblown accusations of the mistreatment of animals-no one asked the elephants...

[mercy party]

profound if you replace the word elephant with you or me. No one ask the elephants up front at the beginning of all this either did they. Either way its sad when Legends die and how swiftly nobody cares.