Truth

Truth

A Poem by REL

 

A poor decision
A shattered life
I see her every day
 
Her confident smile
Her dancing eyes
A soul that’s lost its way
 
She has her friends
Her seemingly happiness
No one could ever see
 
The shame, the lies
The hurt, the pain
The fighting within me
 

© 2008 REL


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love the three line stanzas it caught my eye suddenly, the only thing that was rather confusing was the 3rd line "I see her ever day" in this case I supposed "I see her every day" (I don't want you to take this personally) because I'm sure this review has a hundred mistakes too... But I just though you should know because when I look back and read my writing (that like a hundreds of people reviewed) I find there's many mistakes and feel like a total dunce cause no one pointed it out to me. But I do enjoy your writing and plan on read many more of your poems/stories/book/whatever.
=)




Posted 16 Years Ago


Lovely poem. I liked how it was written in third person - and yet is about yourself. The final line completely changes the poem and makes it worthwile to read. Great job! =)

Posted 16 Years Ago


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REL
REL

Omaha, NE



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I'm a junior in college. I have lots of ideas for stories floating around in my head, but never seem to have the time, or a piece of paper when they come up. I am a Christian, but most of my writing i.. more..

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