L.O.V.E.

as we walk hand and hand

walking down this empty beach of sand

i say i love you

you say the skys such a pretty shade of blue

i say it once more but you just ignore

so i give you some time to think

as the sky turns from blue to pink

we start talking again but on a diffrent subject

i look at the distant object

you ask where we are

as you look back and dont see the car

we keep on walking

but not much talking

as we stop i say the words once more

we are now standing on the most beautiful part of the shore

i say it once more the simple words i love you

you tell me to show that they are true

i dont know what to do

you walk away

then you turn and say

I Love You

Author's Note

it came from the heart

Reviews

[Kristina]

Very touching! It's hard to create good rhyming poems although this one was done incredibly.

[Brooke_Alyse]

sometimes rhyming limits your writing and it takes away from the maturity of the poem
but I think it worked for this one. good job.

[Magicant]

This is powerful: I was moved.
It really is the way it seems to go. The power of this piece comes from how precise it is.
Had she not said the words first, perhaps he would have. Alternatively, and taken on face value, the guy appears to be correct. After all, it's far better to eat the fruit of love than to hear the promise of it.
But the reader is forced to wonder where the male counterpart stands.
As soon as you know you have something, do you lose interest in it?

[Heidi]

you did it again

[Ash<3]

that some skill man. to be able to tell a vivid story by rhyming, very nice =D

[[untitled]]

I bet it did!
It is so true for some people,
and a girl will always want you to show your love,
so you better be ready.
I enjoyed your poem very much.
Thank you for sharing.