Some things never change

Some things never change.

Even though it has been years.

 

Im still the same.

You haven't changed.

 

Why do we do this to each other?

Why do we rip each other apart piece by piece?

Why do we feel the need to make the other hurt?

Why do we rip each other apart piece by piece?

Why do we do this to each other?

 

You haven't changed.

Im still the same.

 

Even though it has been years.

Some things never change.

 

Author's Note

Thought I would play around with formatting a bit... whatcha think?

Reviews

[SoLongAndThanksForAllTh..]

This poem reads as something of a study in the kind of defunct relationship that so many people find themselves in.

As the author says the formatting is an important part of this piece. This isn't merely restricted to the graphology but also to the content which both begins and ends with the acknowledgement that neither party in this relationship has changed. The poem literally reflects back on itself - perhaps hinting at the endless cycle of abuse this couple subject themselves to.

The way in which the narrator includes so many interrogatives in the third stanza suggests that there is always regret after each altercation. Maybe this leads to reconciliation every time and perhaps that is why the couple are still together?

Despite the simplicity of this poem (which always helps to make a poem sound genuine) the mirrored structure makes this a very commendable write.

[Lumière Dé..]

Dude that's so cool! it's a keeper :)

[外人 (Gaiji..]

loved it, played very well with climax and anti-climax, you have a lot of confidence with your verses and this poem shows it :) Simple but elegant and interesting :)

[Kate Hunter]

Well done. It kindof reminds me of the song Battlefield by Jordin Sparks.

[Dreamer<3]

Woah. I really love all the different things you do with formatting. I like this one a lot, because not only is it really good, but it really gives you the message by re-saying everything again, but doesn't bore you because it's all backwards.

[Andreisfree]

...your poetry is fun...each one a little adventure that ends where it begins...and begs to be re-read...your poetry is fun...:)

[Sweets]

This poem has such a sad story behind it.
It reminds me of a movie I watched last week...Great work!

[Coyote Poetry]

It feel like a conversation between a brother and a sister. Sometime even with old age. The two will not be kind to each other. I like the description and the ending. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Aarontastic]

It's a cool experiment =] It's kind of like...the sandwich format lol, because the main body of the poem is in between two identical, but reversed pairs of stanzas. Since the material at the beginning and the end is the same, the middle part naturally becomes the focus of the poem.

Although I liked the repetition of "why do we....?" questions, I wish that they hadn't been repeated exactly--it seems kind of redundant, because it makes it like a 7-line poem. I think it would have been better if maybe you kept the "why do we" part, and the ending word the same, but put in some unique material for each line.

On the other hand, although it is kind of repetitive, it does really drive home and emphasize the point of the poem.

Anyways, I think the format is definitely worth doing some more with, with maybe some minor tweaks. Always cool to try new things though =]

***After reading RDPeck's review and checking out the poem again, I sort of have to agree with what he said "reflecting" quality of the beginning/ending two stanzas. In a meta way, it really does seem to mirror the repetitive, unchanging pattern in a relationship between two people. I wasn't thinking that the first time around, so if that's what you were intending I think it was even better ^^;

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

A profound write :)

[Short.Nerd]

So true! Some things never do change! (: