Her Next Fix

I had the first half written for a while, and one day i sat down and wrote what came to me, i hope you enjoy.

Her hands tremble as she reaches toward it.

Her hearts beating a mile a minute.

Is this truly whats she wants?

She knows it isnt.

But its what she needs.

Shes consumed by it.

Its all she knows now.

Her trembling hands open the drawer.

She sees the glimmer of the blade, and already she feels safe.

She grabs it.

She places the cold blade against her skin.

Shes calm again.

On swift movement, and all the anxieties

and madness from the day are gone.

Shes okay.

For now.

Until another itch for a release comes.

Until her heart begins to throb for that one thing.

Until she feels out of control, and her body yearns for it.

She knows it isnt good.

But she needs it.

And she'll watch again as her hands tremble, as she reaches for the drawer.

Where her next fix awaits.

Reviews

[celyn]

Nice rhyming scheme. An excellent depiction of true struggle and temptation.

[Jaime Tollefson]

It is an interesting topic and I applaud your courage for taking this challenge to write it. One thing I always struggle with is proper punctuation in prose. Though I'm a huge advocate for bending the rules of language, it often can be a glaring distraction. I would suggest you use apostrophe's in your contractions, and perhaps leave the periods off the ends altogether, unless you are completing a thought. I like the imagery of the shaking hands and the idea that the cutting is some sort of fix, like an addiction to a drug. This opens a new concept of the idea and it's brave.

[Miss Coral]

The struggle is quite evident in this piece.. the emotion is very well displayed. I might suggest going into more detail the way it makes her feel, WHY it's so addictive. I would also remove the comma from the last line.
I almost never read pieces about cutting... this was a great portrayal of it, how addictive it can become. Nice write.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The raw nature of the poem gives it its power... cutting is something that happens more then we think but it seems to be a taboo subject so I applaud you for voicing it in verse.