To Breath You In

okay so its not any good... but i hadnt put anything new up so..

Im scared to breath you in,
Knowing i'll have to breath you out.
For a second your a part of me,
That i never want to live without.
Your heart beats in a different chest,
When i wish it was deep in mine,

Im scared to breath you in,
Knowing i'll have to breath you out.
I want to be the ground you walk one,
For a second we'll be together.
To hold your hand, 
Even in the bad weather.

Im scared to breath you in,
Knowing I'll have to breath you out.
I want to hug you,
without knowing theres a end.
I never want to breath you in,
If im going to have to let you go.

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This would make a great song...
I liked the honesty in the words.

[Brittany W]

i really liked this, the lines flowed well together, all i saw is when you said, "I want to be the ground you walk one," you probably ment on.

[Tony]

This is a clear reminder of the temporary way in which we look at what I believe should be permanent connections.
Well Done.

[Willow's Sky]

I liked it! If I could make a suggestion though, you are probably better off not abbreviating anything in a poem... other than that, nice job!