BE YOURSELF!

Nobody can let you down, not even situations and fears.Do not surrender yourself to depressions.

Be careful for the steps you keep,

not on every path happiness leads.

when alone,be not depressed,

reveal your emotions through a written piece!

Be the one in millions and trillions,

and make people feel that you are no less than the other.

if there is nobody to listen to you,

be the soul who himself heals the wounds,

and comes out like a bright dream!

Reviews

[Nicole Philipa K.]

Hello Wajiha. I was Just going through different writers and came across your content.

The poem has a beautiful message, encouraging one to prosper in whatever makes them happy and unique.

I was, however, a bit concerned by the arrangement and choice of words in the second line of the first stanza. The use of what i like to refer to as "old school" English makes your poem unique, so i must commend your use of it. However- it has to be used very carefully or else your message gets lost in the words.

"not on every path happiness leads." Did you use this to mean that not every path one takes leads to happiness? if that is the case, i suggest that you could have added the word "to" and omitted the word "on" such that it would be "not every path, to happiness leads" the comma is used to separate the sentence rather than make it continuous. Also the punctuation changes the meaning of the sentence.

Kindly let me know what your intention was and what you think about this.

N. K

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you so much.
and i will surely try to make the pieces more better .
thank you nicole for your kind words and suggesting me.

[Najam Us Saher]

Very encouraging and inspiring. I agree with first stanza it is so relatable. Beautifully written. I loved it.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you soo much!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[Farhan Shaikh]

Poem really give some skills to enjoy your own company that's what is the best move to be happy, though it is well written a message conveyed beautifully.

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you so much farhan!

[Whirlwind19]

Loved this write of yours ❤

[Wajiha Nayeem]

thank you soo much sistaa!!