Grim Night.

One of those metaphoric poem that relates to my life.

I walk on a deserted road drenched in the rain.

The roaring thunder breaks the eerie blackness.

I wonder if the rain could wash away all my pain.

I wonder if the lightning could clear away darkness.

 

As I feel this blinding light pierce through my eyes

I get reminded of the times I've had under the limelight.

The wind gushes, rattling the trees. I could hear their cries

for help as I stand helpless in the dark, waiting for a sight.

 

I gaze upon the sky and search for the stars and the moon.

I wonder why they hide under the black veil. Why can't

they just come out and see me? Wish I could see them soon.

I yearn for their light. Why can't they heed to my endless rant.

 

The trees around me go berserk dancing to the wind's howl.

The howl grew louder as the trees finally gave up their dance.

The wind came bursting in with a brute force, stopping my prowl.

The lightning faded away. This grim darkness induced a trance.

 

Just when I began to lose myself in this eternal dark maze,

another lightning struck and I glimpsed a tree, standing alone,

Swaying back and forth, determined to overcome this blaze.

It never gave up even when it was about to be thrown.

 

I wondered where it could gather all the strength to withstand

such a turmoil. What could generate this surge of inner vitality?

I crawled towards the tree and clutched it to take the last stand,

I gathered strength from it to survive this wicked reality.

Author's Note

This is one of those poems which gave a satisfied feeling after its completion.Hope you guys enjoy this.

Reviews

[The Dreamer]

yes :D i did ENJOY this.
the first para - so powerful, loved it!
the imagery is wonderful - wind rain thunder and lightening - all the adverse things in ones life. stars and moon - the hope we all look for when surrounded by darkness! it wonderfully depicted the desolateness one feels!
a lone tree resisting the wind and the rain - strong will to fight against it all - wow now that inspired me :)

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! I wrote this poem to inspire myself and to know that it inspired you too, makes me feel very happy :)

[Ovi-Odiete]

I meant satisfied feeling...

[Ovi-Odiete]

And it also gave a satisfied completion after reading....

[vspjaguar]

Wow. Thanks.

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

Quite enjoyable and simulating
Enjoyed it much :)

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! :)

[Steven]

This is a great piece, and I can feel myself riding out the emotional wave throughout the poem, this was definitely a nice touch.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I'm glad this poem created some impact :)

[AYVID N]

I felt somehow validated when I read this realistic piece. As though the tree was me. Sometimes we get our lessons from the most unlikliest of sources. Your story was told excellently. I once again draw attention to another similarity between us - we both like our poems to rhyme :)
Great writing!

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! I write poems mostly when I am emotionally affected and I try to bring those emotions into words. I like it when people relate or when they feel like they are a part of my poetry, such a happy feeling it gives.
And yeah, without rhyme I just think my poem is incomplete.

[PoeticVandal]

really enjoyed reading this poem..

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot!

[rnuff]

WOW this is really good, i can feel emotions rage through.
Awesome write.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot!

[imdvader]

In my opinion this the best piece you have written so far.. bringing such vivid imagery to the readers shows how involved you were writing this poem..

[vspjaguar]

my best poem is always the one that is yet to come :P , thanks a lot!