My perfect woman( a sequel).

Somewhat like a sequel to my poem "the perfect woman".

Her eyes, a black moon in white sky.
I can see a new world in her eye.

Her hair, as black as the black moon,
gently dances to the breeze's tune.

As she speaks, her lips reminds me
how the blooming of a red rose will be.

caressing her cheek, I wonder whether
it feels softer than a bird's feather.

When she is happy, her shy dimple comes
out of it's hiding. A delightful sight it becomes.

Her radiant body shines in warm rays
of love which clears all my internal haze.

Her fingers, beautifully aligned in arrays,                                           
seems like rose petals in many ways.

The beauty veiled by her white robe
is an enigma that tempts me to probe.

In my mind I created this perfect woman
and In my dreams I am her prefect man.

Author's Note

As some of the reviewers of my piece "the perfect woman" wanted me to write a follow up poem, I wrote one by creating my perfect woman in my imagination. Please let me know what you feel about this piece and also spot any errors so I can fix them. Thank you.

Reviews

[being me]

its a beautiful description...but i feel you focused entirely on the outer appearance rather than the inner soul..isn't that what actually matters? what she does to you, what constitutes the person that she is...please am sorry if you do not appreciate my view but this is my point of view.

[vspjaguar]

I totally understand you, but I can't really imagine an inner soul, probably when I find someone in reality, you can expect a lot of poems describing her inner soul.There will be a sequel in the future :)

[being me]

will wait till then:)

[Sheeba]

Let your dreams come true. wonderful imagination, but now a days in our place it is difficult to find girls with such a pretty hair. Also don't waste your time by searching for such a perfect woman.
Poetry is very good.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! there might be someone, right? ;)

[AYVID N]

A young man's beautiful fantasy woman is aptly described in this poem. I liked the last verse the best. It's very simple, endearing and touches the reader's heart.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! :)

[quinfinn]

this is a perfect follow up to the first. everything i hoped for and expected from a gifted writer such as yourself. outstanding!

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! I am really happy to receive such a compliment from a well seasoned writer like you.

[Dennis A. Clark]

Nice poem. This one is stronger than the previous. The lines flow smoothly, and each couplet presents one sharp image.

In the fifth couplet, can you add a space after the period?

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot for your review. Thanks for pointing out, I will add space.

[PoeticVandal]

i cant much more than what the others have said. So ill say what i always say to poems like these.
Beautiful

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot mate!

[Katrina Saaresto]

This is wonderful, just like "The Perfect Woman"! I can vividly visualize how this woman looks like and feel that admiration for her at the same time.
Great job on this,
KS

[vspjaguar]

I intended this as a sequel.Many reviewers asked me why that woman in white robe is special,I wrote this as an follow up poem! thanks a lot, encouraging review as usual! :D

[imdvader]

absolutely brilliant.. I loved those description about dimples.. something very new..

[The Dreamer]

wow :D awesome - so beautiful! no more words to describe!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! seems like a fitting sequel? :D

[The Dreamer]

of course a very fitting sequel - so tell me what happens to the perfect man and perfect woman in the end?? :D

[vspjaguar]

sadly someone woke me up! :P

[The Dreamer]

may you sleep forever and never wake up :)

[vspjaguar]

I wish the same! If the concept in the movie inception was real, I will go inside my mind and never come back, you have seen the movie right?

[The Dreamer]

haha :P inception - havent seen it yet - its about dream invasion n all right?

[vspjaguar]

yeah! being "the dreamer" you have to watch that movie, period. :P

[The Dreamer]

yea i know :) but being the Dreamer - i dont like the idea of dream invasions - dreams are one place i take refuge in all the time - my own world :)

[vspjaguar]

true that! dreams are fascinating, you've heard of lucid dreams? I lucid dream sometimes :)

[The Dreamer]

well i always day dream so i have complete control over my dreams :D- i never have lucid dreams, coz i rarely dream at night :P

[vspjaguar]

thats great! :D