The perfect woman.

Love at first sight.

I stood in the dark gazing at the endless beauty of the moon.

The dark cloud almost nearing the moon is going to veil it soon.

Suddenly from the darkness appeared a woman in a white robe.

She was the perfect woman. Rapidly for her did my heart throb.

 

I have never felt alive in my dormant life until this night

I saw a beauty comparable to that of the moon in my sight.

Her presence began to change me; it gave my life a meaning.

She made me want to rebuild my life again from the beginning.

 

All my senses yearned for her. My eyes were wide open adoring her.

I kept looking into her eyes, thousands of sweet emotions it began to stir.

I could hear a thousand symphonies as she passed me by.

The trance inducing scent of the women gave me wings to fly.

 

I want this to be a fairy tale, where we fall in love forever.

 Loving her deeply everyday, more than ever.

 Yearning for the touch of her lips, warmth of her embrace,

 the gaze into her eyes  and waking up everyday seeing her face.

Author's Note

I enjoyed writing this piece,hope you enjoy guys enjoy reading this too.

Reviews

[The Dreamer]

WOOWW!!! LOVED IT :) - i liked this the most among ally our writings.
the rhyming scheme was really good - gave a good flow to the poem , making it almost melodious. when i read the first 2 lines itself - i knew it was going to be wonderful. "The dark cloud almost nearing the moon is going to veil it soon." beautiful imagery. :)

[vspjaguar]

you have no idea how happy I am reading this review,Thanks a lot :D

[AYVID N]

I love the youthful freshness and vitality of young love expressed here. Very different very endearing.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot for your review :)

[Katrina Saaresto]

Aww, this is wonderful! I love this poem lots!
I love the last stanza b/c it displays an emotion that everyone who is deeply in love craves and you wrote it in the perfect words.
Keep it up!

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! your reviews are very encouraging! :)

[eglantine]

You focus on describing how this perfect woman made the speaker feel, but why? What made her so special to the speaker?

[vspjaguar]

I just described a dream I had of a perfect women.I woke up from the dream and wrote down what I saw and made it into a poem.A few of the reviewers asked the same thing.I'm writing a follow up poem describing why she was so special.Thanks for the review. :)

[quinfinn]

you described perfectly all the feelings induced by this glowing, white robed enchantress, but never described her in detail. perhaps a follow up poem about this lucious pearl would satisfy the inquiring nature that is all men....love this write.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I would love to write a poem about the perfect woman but sadly I haven't found her yet, hence I couldn't elaborate on her.This is just a fantasy poem, I created her, a part of my imagination.Since you gave the idea I will write a follow up poem by giving a life to my imagination.Thanks a lot for reviewing this piece.

[quinfinn]

every woman is the perfect woman. just ask one! it was a pleasure to review this for you

[vspjaguar]

yeah true! every women is perfect, but I want someone perfect for me. If I find her I'll ask her out for sure. I will be writing more in the future, I would love to receive reviews from you.When you find time give me your reviews :)

[quinfinn]

sure.....

[Ambereen]

Well penned ! I hope your "perfect women" becomes a part of life soon ....

[vspjaguar]

in a way she is a part of my life, she is my imagination. But I really wish something like this happens in the reality too! thanks for your wishes and your review :D

[vspjaguar]

*I mean she is a part of my imagination.

[RachelReaper]

this was so beautiful and sweet that I found every line of it drawing me, the reader, in further and further.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I am glad you liked this :)

[being me]

beautiful...but i'd like to add a suggestion that or else i'd want to read a description of your lady love..please do write 1

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I'd love to write a description about my lady love but sadly I haven't found her yet. But I will surely write a poem describing the lady love who is a part of my imagination.Thanks a lot for your review :)

[being me]

that's what i'd like to read...because imagination would create a beauty beyond comparison

[vspjaguar]

sure then, I will write a sequel :)

[being me]

waiting;)

[PoeticVandal]

Beautiful...

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot!

[Pale Rose]

Aww, this is such a sweet poem :) I really like it. The only thing that's bothering me is I think you mean the singular "woman" rather than plural "women". Not a big deal though! Nice write, good work!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! lol, "women" was a typo,I changed it,thanks again :D