BEWITCHED IN MY DREAM

I wrote this poem when I was a teen.I had this dream now and then in which I meet my perfect women.One night I woke up and wrote a poem about it.

Is this how you all feel when you are bewitched in love?

I talk with her everyday and then realize she is an illusion

which eventually fades. I keep wondering why and how

I feel heaven in her presence? I get caught in this confusion.

 

When I close my eyes and open it in the world of fantasy,

She appears before me. I stand awestruck in this pleasant shock.

The beautiful butterflies flying around us added more ecstasy,

along with constant chirping of the birds flying happily as a flock.

 

We sang our romantic songs and danced near the fabulous Pond,

I held her gently and we waltzed under the heavily pouring rain.

Her love was so pure; it took me to another realm beyond,

Where happiness filled the senses and drained all the pain.

 

I keep staring into her eyes, amazed by the way they speak

thousand words through their expressions. My heart is weak,

I couldn't withstand her piercing eyes. it was a manifestation-

Of pure elegance. Her beautiful eyes induced a state of elation.

 

When I am embracing her, I feel that the world I am in

is so real. Only her presence makes this dream world to spin.

I don't want to leave her alone in this world. Oh my dear!

my dream is going to end, she is going to disappear.

 

Every time she takes a step and goes away, my heartbreaks

when she fades away from me, I experience earthquakes

I cannot be in this world without you. I am incomplete,

you are the last jigsaw piece of my life, please complete.

Author's Note

I broke many lines for the rhyme scheme.Breaking of lines might seem weird but I wanted this poem to rhyme.Please give your feedback about this poem.By reviewing this you are reviewing the teen poet from my past.I am eagerly awaiting..

Reviews

[AYVID N]

I love the way you paint this awesome illusion...
Knowing your penchant for rhyming..I would just say that it added to the attractiveness of the piece. Sometimes, though I hear that we have to break rhyme to truly express ourselves and not get confined in the word straightjacket.
But hell!~ This is something I do too. So I like it!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I've tried writing non rhyming poetry, after its completion I see that something is in it, I try to rephrase it and all of a sudden my poem starts rhyming :D

[AYVID N]

sounds so familiar! :)

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! :D

[Coyote Poetry]

Dreams can bewitch our heart and mind. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the very good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[vspjaguar]

I am glad you liked it. Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[PoeticVandal]

And u used a pic of spinning top...
How inceptionic...(is that even a word)

[PoeticVandal]

As for the poem.. like always
beautiful

[vspjaguar]

I'm glad you noticed that! I'll use that for every poem that happens in my dream world! :D

[Jordyn]

I actually had a dream similar to this before. It sucks, but this doesn't. Very amazing! :)

[vspjaguar]

I have a tendency to exaggerate my dreams :P! anyway thanks a lot for your review :)

[vspjaguar]

ps : sorry for the late reply!

[Jordyn]

It's okay!!

[Mary A]

Very romantic.
Bewitched indeed!

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! thanks a lot :D

[Steven]

Very nice write, I of course am able to relate to this. It sure is no fun when you know your dream is soon to end, and she is to disappear. Thumbs up to this.

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! sometimes our dream world seems better,doesn't it? :)

[vspjaguar]

ps: sorry for the late reply!

[rnuff]

I really love this piece, such an amazing write here.
Enjoy the rhyme scheme, and the emotions.

[vspjaguar]

thanks a lot! I am glad you enjoyed this.

[The Dreamer]

yea i agree - it IS lovely -a teenagers dream girl.... the pictures you painted with this poem are beautiful - butterflies, pond , rain. i love the rain! and i dont know why - but i always relate it with love.. good one. :)

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I love the rain too,especially getting drenched in the rain.It just makes me feel so happy!

[The Dreamer]

yea me too XD

[imdvader]

wow! lovely piece my brother..Very creative piece this one.. I loved the last stanza especially. Simply wow!!

[vspjaguar]

thanks mate!