SEEKING LIGHT

Is that light at the end of the tunnel?

Everything else is dark and I am in the spotlight.

Gloomy darkness all around me is a sore sight.

Hands desperately seeking something in the dark,

everything around seems to be a question mark.

 

Why can't there be eternal sunshine or just darkness?

At a distant sight, there seems to be a source of light.

The only torch that can light through this profound duskiness,

is the ray of hope which lights the heart to always put up a fight.

 

Uncertainty is the only thing that seems certain in my life.

Seeking happiness in my life is like walking on a knife.

The minute I forget that fact, fate draws my blood.

For each wrong step I take, more blood do I shed.

 

When I am left bleeding, fate brings in love for the cure.

I just drift away in the air as I don't need to walk anymore.

Flying with the wings of love, lost in the feeling so pure

and divine, I lose all the pain in the elation never felt before.

 

I could not foresee any harbingers of this wicked storm.

I stood on my bleeding feet with a broken wing.

Lightening struck and caused this wing to deform.

This adventurous flight, more pain to me it did bring.

 

Fate brought in love just to make me realise

that the times I had before would have been suffice.

I yearned for something more and suffered more.

Now, seeking ray of hope in the darkness same as before.

Author's Note

Please let me know about your thoughts on this poem.Thank you.

Reviews

[Rainslover]

Its really good! I can connect to it and thats what is the most important thing in a poem for me. You know you should get the 'The Feels'.Lol. But thats what I really liked upon the poem. The darkness and the light gives me hope and I look forward to moving forward. A battle is what I felt when I read this and a great work to bring in some hope, fight more till the eternity.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot. This is exactly the point of all my poems, to connect with reader's emotions and I am happy this has done the job.

[PoeticVandal]

what a nice poem..

[vspjaguar]

Thanks mate!

[Mary A]

On a technical note, I am wondering about the broken rhyme in the third verse.

The darkness and light mix makes me think that there is a cycle of the dark and light that is being experienced. If anything, what I would get most from this poem is an unfaltering sense of hope, and strength.

[vspjaguar]

I somehow broke the rhyme scheme while I was writing.I didn't do the editing because I feared I might change the feel of the poem,so let it be there like a mole on our face.You've precisely read the feel of the poem.Thanks for the review :)

[Mary A]

I see! I was entertaining the thought of it being an intentional break of the rhyme to highlight the word bloodshed -- I felt that, at least.

You're very welcome!

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! the mole in the poem added beauty after all :D