SEEKING LIGHT

Is that light at the end of the tunnel?

Everything else is dark and I am in the spotlight.

Gloomy darkness all around me is a sore sight.

Hands desperately seeking something in the dark,

everything around seems to be a question mark.

 

Why can't there be eternal sunshine or just darkness?

At a distant sight, there seems to be a source of light.

The only torch that can light through this profound duskiness,

is the ray of hope which lights the heart to always put up a fight.

 

Uncertainty is the only thing that seems certain in my life.

Seeking happiness in my life is like walking on a knife.

The minute I forget that fact, fate draws my blood.

For each wrong step I take, more blood do I shed.

 

When I am left bleeding, fate brings in love for the cure.

I just drift away in the air as I don't need to walk anymore.

Flying with the wings of love, lost in the feeling so pure

and divine, I lose all the pain in the elation never felt before.

 

I could not foresee any harbingers of this wicked storm.

I stood on my bleeding feet with a broken wing.

Lightening struck and caused this wing to deform.

This adventurous flight, more pain to me it did bring.

 

Fate brought in love just to make me realise

that the times I had before would have been suffice.

I yearned for something more and suffered more.

Now, seeking ray of hope in the darkness same as before.

Author's Note

Please let me know about your thoughts on this poem.Thank you.

Reviews

[Rainslover]

Its really good! I can connect to it and thats what is the most important thing in a poem for me. You know you should get the 'The Feels'.Lol. But thats what I really liked upon the poem. The darkness and the light gives me hope and I look forward to moving forward. A battle is what I felt when I read this and a great work to bring in some hope, fight more till the eternity.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot. This is exactly the point of all my poems, to connect with reader's emotions and I am happy this has done the job.

[Katrina Saaresto]

This is a very nice poem! You write very nicely, Sai!
I liked the first stanza; it is very strong and full of emotion.
Keep it up!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! :D

[The Dreamer]

brilliant! nice write :)

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! :)

[eglantine]

Sounds like I'm walking through the speaker's dream with the speaker.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot for such a positive review :)

[Nick.B]

Love the second stanza, an interesting piece you manage to write here...great job

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot Nick!

[imdvader]

very powerful writing..

[vspjaguar]

Thanks mate!

[gr8 scott]

The third verse really made me think of walking on a knife. It put a chill in my bones. Like a good director, you drew me into the illusion. Well done, but damn did I have a good chilly shake.

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! actually I wanted to be a movie director but I really couldn't carry on with that dream,that fascination would've influenced my writing too!

Thanks mate for the review,you getting that chilly shake showed how much you were involved into my poem.I am motivated by this review.

[Lexi Nicole]

I love this! Could you have been more consistent with the rhyming? Maybe, but I actually like the broken rhyme. I think it adds to the piece, even if you didn't intend it to. I like the broken rhyme enters in the verse that starts talking about uncertainty. There's a bit of irony in that, I think, and all in all I see it as a happy accident. Great writing, really interesting and thought-provoking ideas. Beautiful work!

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! very nice interpretation of that broken rhyme,that actually shows how creative you are.This seems like a good idea,intentionally breaking rhyme just to get reader's attention,next time I might try it.

Thanks for your review,a very encouraging one.I feel very happy when people enjoy my writing.

[Jordyn]

Beautiful!

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Good poem.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot!