THE BOOK OF LIFE

Welcome to my life.

I'll take you through the chapters of my life.

The first few chapters describes a joyous

kid. In him, innocence and happiness was rife.

Never ever had tasted defeat in his life sumptuous.

                

Turn the pages, you will find love filled with hatred,

a pretentious happy teen with heart full of sorrows.

Going gets tough in life, the path completely blurred.

All that he could find in his heart was broken arrows.

 

His love was filled with hatred because his loved ones

did not love him from their heart. They gave fake hopes

of everlasting love. The fragile heart was stuffed with woes

which choked hard on his soul. Nothing is left in him but bones.

 

For the first time the dagger of betrayal was stabbed

in his back. The pain won’t heal the scar wont fade.

He couldn’t feel pain anymore, his senses numbed.

He was left all alone, he wailed when no one stayed.

 

 

In the next page, the boy reminisce under the wicked sky,

turning back the pages. Sadness choked his throat dry.

He kept gazing at the stillness in the sky. The golden dye

in the sky added a golden shade to tears in his glistening eye.

 

The pages of this book did not deny one thing certainly.

He is yet to reach a milestone in his life. Kept starving

 and craving  to taste success at least once. Waiting keenly

and desperately with promises in his heart overflowing.

 

Sometimes his mind won't think of anything other than

the thought that the destiny has already designed

the path of his life. His ultimate fear is his life span

ending up with him becoming someone undefined.

 

Many of them believed that the book of life is written

already and cannot be re-written. But I beg to differ.

I choose my own destiny, my hope cannot be smitten.

Things they say about what is already written doesn’t matter.

Author's Note

your thoughts about my poem?

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

okay, lets get the critiques out of the way first.
In your first stanza, you don't have to change it, but I think it would look better if you kept "kid" in line two, that way every line ends with a period.
okay, now that that's out of the way.... THANK YOU! I love the meaning of this poem, and the last stanza is my favorite, because I agree with that completely. Destiny and fate are up to you, and if their written... don't accept it if you don't like it! Erasers were invented for a reason, its up to you to get rid of what you don't want to be you and re write it yourself! This got me riled. The ending is the best.

[vspjaguar]

Hi Rachel, I kept "kid' in the third line for the rhyme.Joyous rhymes with sumptuous. Thanks a lot for the review, only comments like this can motivate me to write more.I will be writing more, kindly review them too when you have time.

[RachelReaper]

i will

[AYVID N]

Sadly...Betrayal awaits us before we even draw that first breath and let out that very first wail. It is inevitabel. What is in our hands is to not let it kill our spirit our hope and our child-like innocence. I think we both have that indefatigable spirit in common. Glad to have met you!

[vspjaguar]

Pleasure is mine too! we seem different to the eyes of other people but in this world of poets we can actually connect ourselves with others writing and find lot of common things. I'm glad that I met someone with similar spirit :)

[Natalie Larson]

I really like this poem. I enjoy the progression, and the discovered and defined self illumination at the end.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I'm glad you like this :)

[being me]

His love was filled with hatred because his loved ones
did not love him from their heart...
i can relate to this...but it is this that'll give you the courage to ride on...am sure...

[vspjaguar]

yup that is true, and also things like that makes me write poetry! :D

[imdvader]

Brilliant poetry.. you are going to be a very professional poet in the future.

[vspjaguar]

ha ha! thanks.

[imdvader]

I saw just now.. you too from tamil nadu.. tamzhan da :P

[vspjaguar]

lol! yeah.I am thamizhan too.

[Jordyn]

Absolutely moving and remarkable. I could really feel the emotion and the pain, and I appreciated the story. I agree with the last stanza too, but my favorite line was the first one in the third stanza. Amazing, thank you.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! I am glad you enjoyed reading my piece. "love filled with hatred" quite strong right? I could bring in such emotions only because I went through them.

[Jordyn]

Well thank you for sharing your stories.

[vspjaguar]

my pleasure!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Nice poem.

[vspjaguar]

thanks mate!

[The Dreamer]

its powerful - loved the way you presented your life as the pages of a book. it starts with joy as a child because you are innocent and not yet exposed to all the evil in the world, then hatred creeps in slowly, then betrayal - which is the worst kind of pain, ever.
"In the next page, the boy reminisce under the wicked sky,
turning back the pages."
those lines hooked into me - i always turn back the pages of my journal and read my old entries. humans are like that - we always look back, always reminisce - often sorrowful memories.... i liked the last 2 paras two. i am not sure about predestination - but i do believe that our life is what me make of it! :D good write.

[vspjaguar]

Thanks a lot! you enjoying my reading, make me wanna share and write more.I guess I made a good friend today :D

[The Dreamer]

:) you're welcome.

[Mary A]

Nothing quite as good as a poem conveying an actual story!

On another (and more personal) note, I am not a believer of 'destiny', or at least, the its nature. I believe either destiny is absolute (unchangeable), or there is no such thing as destiny at all!

But good write!

[vspjaguar]

Hi,
Thanks a lot! when I am down,many people tell me that fate is something you can't change,accept this.This sort of belief doesn't motivate me.But when I believe that I can change my destiny,I get the motivation to get back on my feet, that self motivation is all that matters.That is why I chose to believe that fate can be changed.