In A Moment

Scribbled in a notebook during my freshman year of uni, yet I still find this piece quite relevant, and quite passionate. Let me know what you think... :)

Blurry Echoes forever lingering,

                Struck by their passing,

that is when I fear them the most.

     Such beautiful encounters; find beauty in

                                simplicity.

Create the thread of intimacy,

that I view as so sacred

                        to bare.

May they never be forgotten, may they never

be scoffed,

           As tragedy would then seer its mark

on every beautiful smile

                         that was.

Oh the risks

to love,                           to expose

the soul to its most

                     notorious destroyer

            Yet,

to breathe within the moment,

the moment that will be added to that collection,

      is the most blissful scene;

                       Oh how it brings me peace.

Reviews

[eatmills]

I love the visual style of you poem. Yet I don't really have a sense (if you believe that I have any sense) that what you have written requires such distractions. You have a powerful message but it becomes cluttered with this stylish portrayal. I do however like your storyline and the imagery created. Thank you

[Voxharmony]

Thank you, and yes I see what you mean. The piece was originally written via pencil and paper in the format that i also displayed above. At the time, i just wrote it that way to represent how I imagined the poem to be spoken. However, I can see how this would present a distraction to someone reading without the pacing I have in my own head. Thank you again!

[London Poet]

Lovely!