Impurity

The woman bathes,

Attempting to cleanse,

Impurities,

However, even long after

the tub is drained,

they linger still.

Reviews

[Looouise]

I'm agreeing with My Midnight Sun.
One idea portrayed through as little words as possible.
You don't waste time dancing around the topic, but get straight to the point.
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[Rachel DeHart]

You did wonderfully fitting such a vast and powerful idea into a very small and select amount of words. It is very very interesting and grabing.

Good work!
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[MarchAprilMayJuneJuly]

hehh.. it sounds like a lot of people try to do this, and they end up the same...sucks...but not the poem...the poem but short and sweet!

~may XD

[My Midnight Sun]

Ohhhh. This is very very interesting. You have a way of putting one massive idea into so little amount of words. I envy that ability!
VERY well written.

[Hotel Mornings]

I like it. This poem makes you think. It has the potential to have a really dark meaning behind it or not. It definitely is not missing a piece. Short but well formed.