NO SAYING

YOUNG ADULT NOT ALOUD TO DO WHAT SHE DESIRES.

 

 SHE MAY BE NINETEEN, BUT SHE FEELS AS IF SHES FIFTEEN. WANTS TO TELL THEM SHE WANTS OUT, BUT EVERYTIME, SHE GOES TO, SHE IS SHUT DOWN, LIKE EVERY OTHER TIME. THEY TELL HER, WE DONT WANT YOU TO HAVE TO PAY SO MUCH, WRONG THEY JUST WANT  TO KEEP HER BOTTLED UP. FRIENDS OF HERS OUT HAVING A GREAT TIME,  WHEN SHES  FINALLY OFF WORK SHES BABYSITTIN OR RUNIN ARONS FOR THE FAMILY. SHE DESEPERATLY WANTS HER SPACE, BUT THE ONLY SPACE SHE GETS ITS WHEN SHES IN HER CAR AND ONE DAY OF THE WEEK.

  SHE QUESTIONS HERSELF ALL THE TIME. DONT THEY UNDERSTAND SHE ABOUT TO BE TWENTY AND NEED TO LIVE LIFE HOW SHE WANTS. SHES NOT THE GIRL THAT DEPENDS ON MONEY ALL SHE WANTS IS TO BE HAPPY AND ENJOY LIFE. RIGHT NOW SHES THINKING WHAT SHE CAN DO TO GET THE HELL OUT AND SHE JUST FINDS ANY EXCUSE TO  GET IN THE CAR AND TAKE BREATH AND DRIVE FOR ALITTLE THEN REALITY HITS THAT SHES GOT TO TURN AROUND AND COME BACK.

 WE LIVE IN THIS WORLD THATS ALL ABOUT MONEY. SHE SITS THEIR AND TRYS TO SEE HOW SHE CAN KEEP UP WITH BILL PLUS LIVE LIFE AS SHE WANTS. SHE KNOWS YOU ONLY GOT ONE LIFE SO SHE WANTS TO EMBRACE EVERYDAY SHES GOT, BUT HOW CAN SHE WHEN ALL SHE DOES IS WORK AND STILL CAN'T GO OUT AT NIGHT BECAUSE SHES GOT TO BE HOME BY 9:30 BECAUSE THEN THEY FEEL LIKE SHE DOESENT APRRICATE THEM.

YOU MAY ASK, WHY DOES STAY WITH THEM AND JUST DOESEN'T LEAVE. THEY PEOPLE ARE HER GUARDIENS AFTER HER MOTHERS DEATH SO SHE FEELS THEYVE DONE ALOT FOR HER. EVERYTIME SHES ABOUT TO PICK UP HER BAGS SHE REMEMBERS ALL THEY'VE DONE FOR HER. ALL SHE WANTS IS TO BE HAPPY, SHES TOO OUTGOING AND BUBBLY NOT TO BE ABLE TO SOCALIZE WITH THE WORLD. SHE WANTS OUT.

Author's Note

IGNORE THE GRAMMER, WHAT DO YOU THINK? ITS MY FEELINGS THIS IS THE ONLY WAY OUT FOR ME.

Reviews

[JohnL]

I'm sorry. This is a writing site where we submit work for review. It is the reviewer who decides what will and will not be ignored. You ask that we ignore the grammar - ignore it? I couldn't find it. Poetry - and your piece isn't poetry despite being described as such - is about making your feelings understood, expressing yourself to your readers, creating something of quality. To create quality requires care in order to get the best out of the medium you choose. Care means thought, clarity, knowing what you want people to receive from your effort, getting your message across.
I'm sorry but I see none of these basic elements in your submission. If you want people to take your work seriously, you'll have to tidy up your act, concentrate on the rudiments of spelling and grammar and show you mean business. If you have a problem - i.e. dyslexia or something of the sort, you can always resort to a dictionary. Take a pride in the quality of your work and afford your thoughts the dignity of a decent vehicle.
I'm sure you will think of me as a stuffy old Englishman but I tell the truth as I see it. Go on - try and do better - you can and should.