The Waterfall

The Waterfall

A Story by saccharine
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Flash Fiction based on the Waterfall area of Undertale

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All you could hear was a faint breeze and trickling water. It was pitch black. You  open your eyes to find you are lying face down on the dark ground. A small bug flies down onto a grass blade in front of your nose. It fluttered its wings, stabilizing its descent and turned to look at you. You held your breath for a moment, the bug suddenly coming to life with a bright azure color radiating off its back as it took flight once more. Where are you? You quickly sat up and followed the bug with your eyesight, dew drops caressing your cheeks as they rolled off and fell back to the floor. It was too dark to see anything else besides the light of your exotic firefly, a guide in this mysterious place. You  felt the crunching of leaves under your feet and you followed it deeper into the darkness. Putting your hands outward you could feel the a cold, moist rock on either side of you, a cave entrance perhaps. The bug ventured forward and disappeared from your sight. You frantically searched for your phosphorescent friend, waving and moving blindly, hitting walls until you stumble and fall flat on your face. The cold embrace of the floor is starting to feel familiar.

With a groan you rise from the ground and wipe away the dirt from your face. You heard the nearby sound of moving waters and lifted your head to find a flowing river, glowing bright blue. Grey lily pads bob playfully and cattails bundle close the edges of the water. White specks rise out of the river and disappear as quickly as they had arrived. Mushrooms grew next to you, radiating the similar color yet when you reached your hand out to touch them, they flickered off and blended into the shadows. You stood up and, as you walked through the grass, a trail of fireflies revealed themselves and floated up to greet you. They twinkled like stars in the dark void of space and you are the explorer, only traversing a small bit of the cosmos.

You trekked onward, using the river as a path to new territories. You came across a small bridge. The black wood looks worn and as you take careful steps it starts to creak under your feet. Ahead, you see thin trees, their trunks gleaming brightly and fading near the top where the foliage starts to grow. Among the glowing wonderland, shadows vanish from your eyesight. The grassy path gets narrower and you find yourself turning a corner in the cave to find a field of radiating flowers taller than yourself. You hear whispering but you can’t quite make it out. You approach one of them and remember story books from long ago telling a tale of blue wishing flowers. Touching one of the large petals, you lean in closely to hear its soft words:

I hope I can see the real stars one day...

It echoed from flower to flower until it all became washed out noise and the room faded into silence. Now you could clearly hear a roaring waterfall somewhere nearby and the soothing sound fills you with determination.

© 2015 saccharine


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I liked the story a lot. You have a lot of good imaginary going on there. On thing I did notice, however, is that you keep switching from past tense to present tense and back again. For me, that's a little annoying to read, but other than that it's a beautiful short story :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

saccharine

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the constructive criticism, do you feel it flows better in present or past tense?
Cass Morgan

9 Years Ago

I would almost think present- since you have it directed straight at the reader. It would bring the .. read more



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Wonderful descriptions, strong imagery, playful with words. Love it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

saccharine

9 Years Ago

Thanks! ^.^
I liked the story a lot. You have a lot of good imaginary going on there. On thing I did notice, however, is that you keep switching from past tense to present tense and back again. For me, that's a little annoying to read, but other than that it's a beautiful short story :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

saccharine

9 Years Ago

Thanks for the constructive criticism, do you feel it flows better in present or past tense?
Cass Morgan

9 Years Ago

I would almost think present- since you have it directed straight at the reader. It would bring the .. read more
There's a slight problem with the text formatting but I hope that's not too distracting


Posted 9 Years Ago



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