" MY NORTHERN STAR"

"MY NORTHERN STAR"

I TRIED TO CATCH A FALLING STAR
THINKING THAT SHE HAD GONE TOO FAR
SHE KEPT IT HIDDEN WELL
UNTIL SHE CRACKED AND THEN SHE FELL

IF ALL THE HISTORY IS TRUE
SHE IS GOING TO END UP JUST LIKE YOU
YOU MADE IT TO THE OTHER SIDE ...
BUT TELL ME....." WHO WILL BE MY GUIDE?????,,,,,..."

THEY BUILD YOU UP SO THAT THEY MAY TEAR YOU DOWN
TRUST THE OCEAN  AND YOU WILL NEVER DROWN
WHO'S NEXT .... WHO IS GOING TO STEAL YOUR CROWN

I HAVE LEARNED MY LESSON WELL
THE TRUTH IS OUT THERE I CAN TELL
D'NT  LOOK BACK AND D'NT GIVE  IN TO THEIR HI'S AND GOODBYES

FULFILL A LONGING IN YOUR HEART
AND WE WILL NEVER BE APART
AND IF THEY DARE TO QUESTION YOU
JUST TELL THEM THAT "OUR LOVE IS TRUE"

THEY BUY YOUR DREAMS SO THAT THEY CAN SELL YOU YOUR SOUL
IS IT ANY WONDER THAT WE HAVE LOST CONTROL
FEELING COME... FEELINGS GO......
BUT IF THEY D'NT .... ITS "LOVE" OH ... HO.....!!!!  :-)

I HAVE LEARNED MY LESSON WELL
THE TRUTH IS OUT THERE
YOU CAN TELL

LIVE YOUR LIFE WITHOUT REGRET
D'NT BE SOMEONE WHOM PEOPLE CAN FORGET

WHENEVER YOU ARE LOST JUST REACHOUT FOR ME...
AND YOU WILL SEE ME HUMMING LIKE A BEE....

HAVE LEARNED MY LESSON WELL.....
THE TRUTH IS OUT THERE I CAN TELL

Author's Note

Dedicated to "SNUFF"

Reviews

[Garry Maan]

nice...

[Zoe Jay]

This poem kid of changes as it goes along. I think it finishes stronger than it starts. The last six lines are really good. Overall I like the rhyme scheme but there are a couple of points near the start where it feels a bit unnatural, don't sacrifice the meaning of the poem for the structure, this poem needs room to grow as there is loads of potential here :-)
I do love the directness and the conversational tone, the overall slightly colloquial aspect of it gives the poem the feel of a whispered conversation. Well written! :-)

Pretty awesome.
Great meaning behind it.
Excellent use of imagery.

[lavina k.]

Nice one!!!!!!
i loved it and realized its true meaning!!!1
keep writing!!!!