Disconnected From Messenger

What does it feel like to lose all belief in yourself?

It’s the sorrow of being untouched

By hand, by sound of voice

Reflected

 

It’s a wound within the chest

A throbbing ache

Regretted

 

It’s a dense fog of the soul

Succumbing to bad posture

The body language of one who knows

Only how to falter

 

It’s the beckoning gloom of endless night

The tireless wake of the surf

It’s a shelf stocked with memoirs that gave up the fight

Fear of a premature birth

 

It’s sitting alone

Cast aside

By one’s own expectations

 

It’s choosing to cry

Without knowing why

The pity your only salvation

 

 

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Reviews

[IMOGEAN]

As someone who's shelve is filled with memoirs, and even my own sits there, unfinished. I understood this piece. Succumbing to bad posture and dreaming of the flesh that shall only be read through the words of a cold computer screen. Endless nights that will never be fulfilled by the one thing that can truly make me feel whole.

Imogean~

[Jacquie]

God I loved this. A little close to home for those who have had an intimate relationship with depression, making it the slightest bit uncomfortable, fearing to graze it again..yet in another sense, comfortable in knowing that there are words that so perfectly match the feeling. And grateful, too, for the wordsmith that has the talent to connect them all.

[ElJays Nicholas]

It hints at emotional suffering as the product of our own choosing, how we cower within ourselves from fear of loving, touching, and opening up to each other. And we cling to self-pity as a kind of comfort, maybe blaming others for how we've made ourselves to be. This is what it speaks to me, with a somber tone. Very well written and thought provoking....

[Jamye]

seems as though our writing is linked in a spiritual sort

[D.I.]

I love the flow and the rhyming scheme of this whole piece.

"It's choosing to cry
Without knowing why
The pity your only salvation"

I can completely relate to that stanza.

[Wildfleour]

Wow - this really captures that feeling of being disconnected - from one's own self.

Nice!

[SM Davis]

This is excellent and exactly what I asked for. THANK YOU SO MUCH for your submission!!! :-)

[Rambling Prose]

Beautifully written...

[EvesDaughter]

"It's a dense fog of the soul
Succumbing to bad posture
The body language of one who knows
Only how to falter..."

I rarely quote an entire stanza
but this truly gave me a zinger.
Your writing is extraordinary -
I barely even notice the rhyme,
which sort of startled me...lol
I love this. It's good to read your
work.

[.::Cup^E^Cake*RaWr!*::.]

THis is an amazing piece.
Very few poems actually rhyme,I have to have mine ryhme.
I think you did very well expressing emotion & at the same time telling a story.
This is great.
Keep writeing!!

[Dianne]

It's sitting alone
Cast aside
By one's own expectations
This in particular I can relate to. I've been there. Complicated emotions very well expressed.