Fall

Fall

A Poem by Lia
"

Bored in chemistry (as always) and ended up writing this in my notes.

"
Closer to the edge
With every step
She took.
Holding his heart
With her
As he followed
Close behind.
She was broken
Hurting
He called for
Help.
Then she jumped.
His heart
Shattered
As he 
saw
her
f
 a
   l
     l
       .

© 2013 Lia


Author's Note

Lia
Guys I know I can't write well so don't be mean, okay?

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hmm sounds like she committed suicide and broke his heart while doing so. You did a good job writing this, it is short but it creates a picture of the scene, you just wonder why she did it though. I liked how you put the word fall, it is like he is watching her slowly fall down.

Good Job

Posted 11 Years Ago


A nice little poem, I always like seeing people use the layout to help reinforce the poem, I cant do it but it's nice to see others do it well :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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I'm Lia, 16 years of age, and from California. I enjoy Supernatural and playing my viola. more..

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