Water In the MOON

All the lovers deeply attached with the moom, the cooly sensation and sentiments..

Dear Moon

In the lonley sleepless night

You are with me

Sharing my dense silence

 

You Filled and coloured

Her cheeks beauty

With the shining nights

Walking miles to sand

 

We only share with you

For the millions of years

Our Joy, Romance, Agony

And tiredness

 

But We never thought

While digging your heart

For find out the water

Our tears match.

 

 

Author's Note

Moon impact.. Millions of lovers shares their love with there loved ones with the beautiful moon, but now badly demolished their imagination,

Reviews

[Muse]

I watched this event closely. I don't think it was to just find water....I don't even think this mission had good intentions. But it bothered me just how many people did not even know about this! I loved the inspiration behind this poem...WELL DONE! xo

[barleygirl]

I am a moon watcher & I love how your poem brings out many things that can be felt from the lunar shine: joy, romance, agony, tiredness. I love that you use the full complement of human emotion, with contrasts, not only the pretty parts. You convey an interesting, powerful message with strong imagery, but I also wonder if you spend time thinking about how your lines SOUND. Reading out loud, we can do "sound" crafting like alliteration & consonance (repeating a sound at the beginning of words, or similar sounds within words). Just some ideas to consider . . . your writing is well done! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kim's Poems]

OH WOW i totally love this piece, this is amazing!

[Ursula Kay Vos]

Very well written and thought out. I like the concept.

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

Hi Vinod, thanks for your review of my poem, The Only Way. I appreciate what you say. I like your poem but have a couple of suggestions.

In the lonely sleepless night.

We share with you
for millions of years
Our joy, romance, agony
and our tiredness

but we never thought
while digging your heart
to find the water
match our tears.

I assume English is your second language. Hope you find my review constructive.

Smiling at you

Tai

[Elaenor Aisling]

A truly lovely piece. Love the line about "sharing my dense silence" it captures the essence of night and the moon so well. Beautiful work.

[anne p. murray- LadeeAn..]

This is very beautiful my friend It shows is truly comes from the heart of you

[Sarah]

i love the first part, it is very catchy. you seem to see the world in a diffrent way. your poems are truely amazing.

[ShameemAkhtar]

I like the start

By addressing the moon as 'Dear Moon', I don't think you could have illustrated this privileged rapport any better

Also I like your terming, 'dense silence', makes it so much palpable.

May I also suggest: In your second set of lines, use present tense instead of past. Makes the poem more lively and gives greater punch

[Misty Blue Eyes]

i love the way you see life... great poem