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I have the oceans running through my veins,

The dust of earth is what I breathe,

My lungs are filled with dark green forests,

My curves are never ending hills...

Sharp rocks I use for my protection,

I use hurricanes to braid my hair,

In desert I lay my head at night,

With burning coal inside my chest.

Reviews

[songstress]

This is absolutely beautiful. It makes me envious that you can write a nature piece in such an elegant manner.

You bring human characteristics such as curves and hills, vulnerability through the use of rocks and hurricanes, to tell such a beautiful story. I normally-pardon my tone-don't like nature writing because I have such a hard time writing it myself. But, reading your piece makes me think otherwise about the genre.

your piece showed me an articulation and beauty in the common surroundings of the mountains, seas, and sky, and I must say I appreciate your sharing this. good job.

[Victoriana]

Huge thanks for the support:)

[FIN]

Mother Earth...

I love it!

Some nice imagery, too.

Ms. Victoria!

Much love,

LR

[DoormanDan]

Well, I don't this Chuck Norris, Bruce Lee and Bear Grylls combined could have anything on this! Great job with the descriptions and imagery; they're strong and well written. The only suggestion I have to make is to rewrite the line "Let hurricane to braid my hair" to "I use hurricanes to braid my hair" or some other way if you can think of one, because that line is a bit clumsy. Other than that, fantastic job!

Oh, and I was curious about the title. Is there any particular reason you have the title like it is, or are you just trying to think of a good name for this? :)

[Victoriana]

Yehh..! you're right, I already fixed it!:) English is not my first language, so clumsiness happens:)) I really appreciate your advice though.
This is probably the first, serious and inspiring (for me while writing) poem I ever wrote and I just couldn't find the name for it, also didn't feel like I want to either, as if everything I wanted to say was in the poem itself, name wouldn't have made any difference.
Thanks again!:)

[DoormanDan]

Ah, I see the reasoning behind that, and there's certainly no harm to doing that. After all, as lovely as a title can be, a piece doesn't necessarily need one in order to be good. Keep up the fantastic work, and may you continue to be inspired! ;)