Letter To Priya

Words to my daughter

                                               Letter To Priya

I know you're sad sometimes,

And words ring hollow,

Even from those you know love you,

Life is strange and unexpected,

There's no handbook and no manual,

And most likely it would be in a foreign language,

If it existed.

                                                                                                                                  

But you needn't worry little one,

Life could never,

Wear down a spirit as strong as yours,

Or a  heart as big as yours,

Or ever dull a smile as gorgeous as yours,

So if you're tired take a rest,

If you need to talk talk to me.

You'll make mistakes ,

But that's how you learn,

You'll have your heart broken ,

But you'll find someone,

Who'll help you mend it,

Because life is hard,

But it can be so great and you will hold it in the palm of your hand.

Author's Note

I wanted my daughter to know this.Sappy but from the heart yes :)

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

reading simply takes the breath out of me .. i raised my children (2 boys and 2 girls) by myself as their mother died at a very early stage of the game .. a long time ago now .. but even now (children all grown and with their own families) i can see their mom saying just this thing ... your poem .. and these situations do continue sometimes .. i intend to copy this (with credits due;) and send it to my oldest (a daughter) as i think she will be blessed ... may i?
E.
ps. i think this is one of the best (what i call) prose /poems i have read ... it packs such an emotional appeal .. well done says i!

[Vidya Bacchus]

My gosh I am so honored by your kind words.Of course you may.Even when the world tosses us to the ground they always love us unconditionally as we do them.Thank u E.

[Einstein Noodle]

thank you ..i know it will make her cry a bit but ..a good kind of cry ..love you! and thank you again!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome my sweet friend :)

[Mayank]

the days of letters are gone and there's very beautiful assuring message in there...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much Mayank :)

[Nusquam Esse]

I recommend only small tweaks, such as "no handbook or manual", "a heart as big as yours" (I don't think or is necessary here), "If you need to talk, talk to me.", and then split the last line into two segments I think? All in all, this is a great poem for your daughter; and yes, I can see well that it is from the heart. I wish that I had had someone to sit me down when I was younger to tell me these things... not only because knowing that the future had more to offer than I thought would have made it easier to get through... but because it would have made me believe that they actually cared enough to see me for who I was, and to worry about what I was going to endure in life. Your daughter is lucky, and hopefully she knows that.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you c**k dragon I am glad for the tweaking.It is best to say things that you feel because you never know what tomorrow will bring,The last line ended up that way because I was trying to keep with my seven line stanza lol.I will of course fix what you said.Thank you again :)

[Nusquam Esse]

I find that cutting out all those words at and under three letters (and, the, as, a, but, or) whenever possible leads to a stronger delivery with poetry; if it is not strictly necessary for meaning, then it is usually better to cut it. They are necessary in prose, but not so much in poetry; and the average strength of your words is intensified without them. As for the seven line stanza thing; perhaps take your final half of that last line, and make it stand by itself? Make your delivery of an ending stand out.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thanks again for taking the time to help ma girl out.I will fix for sure,I like the last line so much :)

[Beccy]

If ever your daughter feels sadness, she will only have to read this and her spirit will soar. A beautiful poem, so clearly written from the heart and not the least bit 'sappy.'.

Beccy.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Beccy.I hope so :)

[Stonz P.]

This is so nice. Very heartfelt. Your daughter is very lucky.

Good write. I like how you have structured it and it has a nice flow to it.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Stone :)

[xDalliance]

Aw, man. This is great. It's simple, it's nothing fancy but it's a direct path to your heart. Godmother, this is very nice.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you J.You have made godmother happy lol

[Matching Socks]

Oh my gosh... This is just lovely!
What a precious gift.
xo :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Ana :)

[Sreenath]

great , unconditional care for daughter is brimming out of the bowl of imagination
since these lines have not reached there, there is more beauty to this piece
and perfect title for what you have written . in the end life goes on :) peace ... keep smiling

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Shree for reading and reviewing my work.

[anne]

OMG....I really don't have words.....a precious gift that could be given from a mom....you girl will feel too proud.....a proud daughter......a beautiful relationship in so beautiful words.... :))

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Anne I love her and am so proud of her more than I could ever say to her.You have made me happy with your kind words ;-)

[anne]

When parents say so, it is the most precious moment for a child....god bless you both....:))

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you and may god bless you and yours ;-)

[TheLostMind]

"You'll make mistakes ,
But that's how you learn,
You'll have your heart broken ,
But you'll find someone,"
Very well chosen words. Quite encouraging.
I didn't find this "sappy", actually its quite realistic.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so very much for your kind words ;-)

[Avinash]

You are a great mom to your beautiful daughter. Hats off to both of you :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Avi your words mean a lot ;-)