Let Me Go

Knowing something should be but never will be.

                                         

                                               by Vidya Bacchus and Jonathan Edward Furches                     

Tell me to go otherwise I'll never leave,

Wrapped in your arms I want to believe,

That I belong here this is my home,

And she's the one that can't leave you alone.

Tell me we're wrong even though we feel right,

Tell me you love her and I'll go without a fight,

Don't sear me with kisses that ask me to stay,

And damn me with promises that always go astray.

Let me be let me go,

Show me balance within the depth of cold,

Allow my fears to find me near,

Even I understand your greatest fear.

I know your right within the fight,

Your golden gloves I see,

Hopes, leaps, bounds and promises,

They are all my eyes can see.

I need to leave but I have to stay,

Destiny's tender I gladly pay,

If today is ours then lets not ponder,

If your tomorrow is promised  to another.

Author's Note

A collaboration with my friend and oh so talented poet Jon.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

My new favorite of yours... Oh my goodness what a collaboration girl...

"Don't sear me with kisses that ask me to stay,

And damn me with promises that always go astray."

Love, lust, relationships are so dang confusing and complicated by thoughts, doubts, and expectations... Perceptions of the psyche muddied by emotions of the heart:)

Deeply moving... beautifully written

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much April.Your words as always mean a lot :)

[AprilRN1210]

You're very welcome girl and likewise of course:)

[??????]

Two very passionate writers placing on a page:) Awesome:)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

You both have Nicely penned this.



I loved these stanza's lines here the most.




Let me be let me go,

Show me balance within the depth of cold,

Allow my fears to find me near,

Even I understand your greatest fear.




I know your right within the fight,

Your golden gloves I see,

Hopes, leaps, bounds and promises,

They are all my eyes can see.




Thank you for your lovely review and comment you
left on my page and this lovely poem you Jon did.


Blessings. kindred poet

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Kindred for this lovely review and Jon thanks you too.It is truly deeply appreciated and of course you are welcome you are a great writer :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

it's a pleasure my friend. you're quite welcome. Thank You. You and Jon are too Great writers. I am working on a collaboration with Jon we Haven't finished it yet but we did a bunch on Wednesday and may do more today it is turning out Beautifully. I always Enjoy reading yours and Jon writing. Blessings. kindred poet

[I Am Svetlana]

While I read this, it reminded me of an affair between two people. A very secret, yet luscious love that would tear the other two lovers apart. She wants to stay, but doesn't want to risk getting in trouble, yet would understand if he went back to his other lover in the end. The first stanza would have to be my favorite, but I don't console cheating in any type of serious relationship. If someone cheats, then I believe they are missing something important or yearn something that the other simply cannot give them.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hey Emily hope you are good girl and thank you for taking the time to read this one.You are very spot on with your review,Thank you again :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Tell me we're wrong even though we feel right,
Tell me you love her and I'll go without a fight,
Don't sear me with kisses that ask me to stay,
And damn me with promises that always go astray.

Those lines captivated me. They where moving so meaningful, strong, romantic and heartbreaking. The rhyming was also great and seemed to come naturally, didn't feel forced.
The whole poem was beautiful, but heartbreaking.
Brilliant write!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Cimmy for this truly wonderful review :)

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

you are most welcome hun :)

[Pax]

I so love the rhymes, it flows so smoothly and really good. It is almost as if it is only one voice I heard as I read along, I just thought it was two separated time-lines of a poem. It is a great collab.

I find this piece reflects reality that some affairs are not forever kept, facing facts that you can't love two person all at once or it never good to rock two boats at the same time - in that matter promises goes dry.

a very amusing piece!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so very much Pax :)

[Berryskull]

Wow, I love it. I've always loved poetry (although I've never been any good) and it's so rare to find poets who write so well. It's wonderful.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much Berry.You are a great writer if your story is any indication :)

[Saddam]

If today is ours then lets not ponder,
If your tomorrow is promised to another.

Beautiful collaboration. We all know both of you are very talented at this platform. And your love verse is Kamal.

Hopes, leaps, bounds and promises,
They are all my eyes can see.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Ssaad for your lovely words :)

[Brokensoul]

I love this piece. Very beautifully written a great collaboration

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much Sonashree.It was great writing with my buddy Jon :)

[David Scott]

Boy oh boy... The innocent mind will never understand the complexities of the heart torn by betrayal.
This is how the moments feel. We do not see the unethical lies and the stealing of affections promised elsewhere... We do not want to admit the futility, the vanity of this affair of life in general. We certainly do not want to face the facts in this specific instant.
"Tell me we're wrong even though we feel right," is an oxymoron. It feels perfectly wrong, but it does feel perfect... Yes, I see the poetry. I regrettably understand the situation.
The last two lines are even a delusion I think... What was promised in a yesterday and is still promised in tomorrow can never be given to another today... It is a poorly shared lending of an unsustainable fantasy. OH, but it taste soooo good. Yes, it is so with everyone who finds their hearts infected with this disease. Easy to catch, forever scaring our souls, and never the isolated case we believe it to be. It is pandemic...
I loved the write. You have captured the reality of this fantasy.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Wow this was such a lovely review David I wish I could save it in my faves lol.You are right but it all comes down to the heart wanting what the dratted thing wants. you so very much for your awesome review :)

[Shirlena]

I read this the other day and meant to come back and leave a review. Y'all created a heart wrenching piece of art together, the words in sync and harmony...now I'm going to go somewhere and choke back these tears *sniff* (smile). These sad love writes are working on me.