My new favorite of yours... Oh my goodness what a collaboration girl...
"Don't sear me with kisses that ask me to stay,
And damn me with promises that always go astray."
Love, lust, relationships are so dang confusing and complicated by thoughts, doubts, and expectations... Perceptions of the psyche muddied by emotions of the heart:)
Deeply moving... beautifully written
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much April.Your words as always mean a lot :)
Thank you for your lovely review and comment you
left on my page and this lovely poem you Jon did.
Blessings. kindred poet
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Kindred for this lovely review and Jon thanks you too.It is truly deeply appreciated and o.. read moreThank you Kindred for this lovely review and Jon thanks you too.It is truly deeply appreciated and of course you are welcome you are a great writer :)
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it's a pleasure my friend. you're quite welcome. Thank You. You and Jon are too Great writers. I am .. read moreit's a pleasure my friend. you're quite welcome. Thank You. You and Jon are too Great writers. I am working on a collaboration with Jon we Haven't finished it yet but we did a bunch on Wednesday and may do more today it is turning out Beautifully. I always Enjoy reading yours and Jon writing. Blessings. kindred poet
While I read this, it reminded me of an affair between two people. A very secret, yet luscious love that would tear the other two lovers apart. She wants to stay, but doesn't want to risk getting in trouble, yet would understand if he went back to his other lover in the end. The first stanza would have to be my favorite, but I don't console cheating in any type of serious relationship. If someone cheats, then I believe they are missing something important or yearn something that the other simply cannot give them.
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10 Years Ago
Hey Emily hope you are good girl and thank you for taking the time to read this one.You are very spo.. read moreHey Emily hope you are good girl and thank you for taking the time to read this one.You are very spot on with your review,Thank you again :)
Tell me we're wrong even though we feel right,
Tell me you love her and I'll go without a fight,
Don't sear me with kisses that ask me to stay,
And damn me with promises that always go astray.
Those lines captivated me. They where moving so meaningful, strong, romantic and heartbreaking. The rhyming was also great and seemed to come naturally, didn't feel forced.
The whole poem was beautiful, but heartbreaking.
Brilliant write!
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Cimmy for this truly wonderful review :)
I so love the rhymes, it flows so smoothly and really good. It is almost as if it is only one voice I heard as I read along, I just thought it was two separated time-lines of a poem. It is a great collab.
I find this piece reflects reality that some affairs are not forever kept, facing facts that you can't love two person all at once or it never good to rock two boats at the same time - in that matter promises goes dry.
Boy oh boy... The innocent mind will never understand the complexities of the heart torn by betrayal.
This is how the moments feel. We do not see the unethical lies and the stealing of affections promised elsewhere... We do not want to admit the futility, the vanity of this affair of life in general. We certainly do not want to face the facts in this specific instant.
"Tell me we're wrong even though we feel right," is an oxymoron. It feels perfectly wrong, but it does feel perfect... Yes, I see the poetry. I regrettably understand the situation.
The last two lines are even a delusion I think... What was promised in a yesterday and is still promised in tomorrow can never be given to another today... It is a poorly shared lending of an unsustainable fantasy. OH, but it taste soooo good. Yes, it is so with everyone who finds their hearts infected with this disease. Easy to catch, forever scaring our souls, and never the isolated case we believe it to be. It is pandemic...
I loved the write. You have captured the reality of this fantasy.
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10 Years Ago
Wow this was such a lovely review David I wish I could save it in my faves lol.You are right but it .. read moreWow this was such a lovely review David I wish I could save it in my faves lol.You are right but it all comes down to the heart wanting what the dratted thing wants. you so very much for your awesome review :)
I read this the other day and meant to come back and leave a review. Y'all created a heart wrenching piece of art together, the words in sync and harmony...now I'm going to go somewhere and choke back these tears *sniff* (smile). These sad love writes are working on me.