I live

Being knocked down does not mean you should stay down

     I LIVE

I live with my scars,
A poignant reminder of the pain you have wrought,
In the name of love you tore me to shreds
With every precise incision you rendered me broken.
Punishment for daring to fly to close to the sun.

I live with my distrust,
Because it is my armour,
In a world that is rife with thorns,
I was so young to learn ,
Exactly what a smile could hide.

 

I live with my regrets,
That were sired by your betrayal,
Regret that I was'nt wiser,
Regret that i didn't percieve your smile as a guise,
Before I followed you blindly to be burnt at the stake.

 

I live proudly with my triumph,
Over your relentless need to break me,
I soar high now basking in the sun,

Too thick skinned to be scorched,
Too much older to ever be that naive again.
                                  by  vidya

Author's Note

Every life experience serves to teach us something.It is up to us if we learn from them.

Reviews

[Neon]

Yup! Your right, every-thing teaches us a new and new lesson of the life whether with the worst time or the good but it's foresure that everything what time brings in life is what that helps us in future dealing with the situations right... because every second brings happiness and the funniest thing is that it also brings the sadness too so, it's all on us how we deal with it and live with it, accept it in our life to live the life with peace because "peace is not what that comes easily in everyone's life, it takes time and times takes moments and moments brings memories and the memories always make life."

This write's, am damn sure, comes out from your real life, I can feel the feelings of yours that's transformed into the words. I hope everything's cool there. It's seemed you've passed through much pain and regrets in your life because such kinda pieces only those one can write who come passed through such kinda worst situations.


May God bless you!

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are wise my friend.I did go through some bad stuff but I came out stronger for it.Thank you much:)

[Neon]

The pleasure's mine, yeah, I knew that, because I can feel the pain of the angels through their expressions, through the depth of their words. So, are you ok now?

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yeah I am real good now thanks for asking:)

[Neon]

Great!
It's my honor to ask your well or not because keep angels happy ever is "Neon's" first priority.
Don't ya know??

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yeah yeah I know for sure :)

[Anita Singh]

The games people play!
"In the name of love you tore me to shreds " Love this line.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes people are mean sometimes,Thank you Anna :)

[Master K-tops]

This was captivating till the end. The story-like structure of the poem also works very well. The transition from victim to conqueror of our downs in life is in itself a virtuous thing. Refusing to fall,but instead,rise higher than you ever were before,is the ultimate spirit that can make you a survivor. You made a mistake in one line
'Punishment for daring to fly to close to the sun.'
Lovely poem. You have taken a very depressing experience and coverted it into unrivalled strength which has given birth to an amazing work. The last stanza really spoke to me. Good job. :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much

[icelandicblue]

I totally agree that each experience teaches us something and that pain does get us ready for stronger storms that wait on the horizon...and ultimately we should never give up.

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is true.Thank you for your kind words.

[Brittany Zedalis]

You're very right. We are always learning new things from every experience. Thank you for posting this.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much for reading :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

you're welcome ^-^

[外人 (Gaiji..]

Great job, that's definitely heart-felt, i can see it ! You let your heart speak at your place and the result is obviously great.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you.

[Cassie]

I loved the last line although the whole poem is good and full of wisdom, it is true that being knocked down doesn't mean we stay down.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Cassie much appreciated :)

[kushtrimthaqi]

ah, the foolishness of being young.... a beautiful state indeed (even though painful)

[Vidya Bacchus]

That is the truth.Thank you very much for you kind words :)

[Jack...]

So very telling is this piece. Started out weak and gained strength by the ending and is so well written. Be strong my friend...touch the sun and laugh at those below that has said you never could...very cool indeed.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Jack I will try to that for sure :)

[Nusquam Esse]

How tragic, Icarus's sin, or rather fault, was hubris, not so much mere curiosity. It is a sad thing, to feel that trying to love and understand someone is hubris. As you get older, no doubt you will cease to feel like Icarus falling to his death; and more like Daedalus, forced to watch others fall with your own device; a fate every bit as tragic.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you for your most insightful review it is much appreciated:P