Who has conquered whom ?

love and lust collide and make a yummy concoction:)

                  Who has conquered who?

 

Sweet decadence resides in your eyes,

Blissful agony proclaimed by your sighs,

Ravenous desire burns up my will,

You're a sumptious banquet and I must have my fill.

 

There is no reality where you are not my drug of choice,

A heady concoction that steals away my voice,

Lascivious thoughts are consuming my soul,

Your total surrender my ultimate goal.

 

Heaven's angel or Devil's Spawn,

I accept you as either,all the faces you've worn,

Brands me a slave to your every whim,

My eternal soul mate because you surely are him.

 

Never before have I bowed to a man,

Laying my soul bare in the palm of his hand,

Trusting him to do me no harm,

Accepting me in all the colours I am.

 

So slaughter my fears and claim your prize,

See the truth reflected in my eyes,

I would fight dragons to be at your side,

So all I can say is "Hold on it's gonna be a hell of  a ride"

 

 

Author's Note

I have no idea about this one.It came to me amidst a lot of pounding ear shattering music:)

Reviews

[David Scott]

Heavy metal poetry! Ha.
Sing it girl!
I'd give it three thumbs up, but I seem to be missing one thumb.
Is there supposed to be a "whom" somewhere on this page? ;) IDK...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha David I accept your three thumbs up even if you are a thumb short.No "whom" mister lol

[David Scott]

It is just I "for whom the bell tolls"... Ha.
I know the proper way to say this is who and who like you used it, but I swear it just feels like it needs a whom somehow someway...
I was hoping for a little play on those words in your poem after the title, but the poem was not a subtle jest as much as a hard hitting ride!
I had to poke a little fun... My mood today.
Sorry for blowing up a twenty some odd comments on your other poem... yikes! "read more"

[Vidya Bacchus]

That was some magic trick getting it seems so many comments on bananas .Colour me impressed .I will think about the "whom" that is weighing heavy on your mind and perhaps I will put it in there somewhere lol

[wordman]

it sounds like what love should be

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you .Indeed you are right:)

[Ahena MK]

Never before have I bowed to a man,
Laying my soul bare in the palm of his hand,
Trusting him to do me no harm,
Accepting me in all the colours I am.

lovely lines
ahena

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

[The Hampstead Poet]

Very powerful and expressive. A great read!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much.Your words are much appreciated:)

[writ rajat]

''see the truth reflected in my eyes'' its very nice lines i want to use this in my next poem title can i please

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you and I guess you may if you like:)

[writ rajat]

thanxx you vidya

[Vidya Bacchus]

.............................:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

a highly descriptive piece that allows one to mellow in the moment, well done, good read.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

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Vidya pen onnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn :) This was awesome:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Awwww thaaaaaaaaaank yooooooou lol.I will try:)

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Goooooooooooooooooooooooooooooodddddddddddddddd :) Welcome:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahahaha...........:)

[Sanober]

And this truly was one hell of a ride....absolutely amazing rhythm and meter. Almost reminds me of rockstars and heavy metal music. So dark and delicious....i am blown away!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much my friend!!!!!!!I was listening to very loud music when I wrote this.

[Neon]

Lol! Am really chuckling to think what should i write into the review! Ha!
Hey, by the way, thanks for accepting me in an an suite ..well don't worry, whether am a devil or an angel you'd be damn safe around me.. but am afraid of me! Haha! (Please don't scratch my back enough times.. lol)

Ah! Now come to the point!

I think this write's what that a new-age wants but this write's purely safe and this write's not made in an intention giving someone harm but the new-age's what that wants harm and hurt n which's not good. When the new-age'd onself learn that hurt's not what angels want but love the world'd be peaceful and there won't be devils .. (but hey some devils are very cute as same as me) So, please go to the hell to ride with only cute devils who're in suite of mine..Haha! Because only they'll keep you damn safe and put you right into the bucket of flowers only to see one smile right onto your beautiful face :)

No one has conquered, every-body's won!
Ha!

By the way, don't worry, if am won that you too after all we both enjoy the ride. Hahah!
This write's yeah very nice, concept is damn hot as same as you .. lol

By the way, Please don't fight! There's no need to fight dragons to come at mah side .. your already at my side :) So, hold on, we're gonna enjoy the ride of hell at night! HAHA!

Ouch! Ah!
Hey! He..hey! Wait!
Holy-Crap! People looking at us!

No..No!
Not ye..yet!
Not Here!

Ouch don't bite my ear!
Opps! Don't pierce my back with your nails!
It's not a right place!

OK..OK!
We'll ride the ride of hell at night!
Please! Not yet!
But In nights!

So ... Hold on your nights!
Haha!
"(Laugh)"

[Vidya Bacchus]

Hahaha funny funny guy.Thank you for your lovely review:)

[Neon]

Ha! I love seeing someone as beautiful as you feel happy .. by the way, i love you "Hahaha", your "Hahaha" is what that makes me lost into the world of angels to give them kind pleasure of mine so that all angels could come and live right into the depth of mah heart :)

Ah! This time i want something more from you apart from hugs and kisses, i just thought to raise now from hugs and kisses .. so, would ya mind if i ask for some scratches on my back by you???????

[Vidya Bacchus]

You know they will cart you off to the looney bin my friend lol

[Neon]

OMG! Really!
That means, you've got so much sharp nails!
S**t!

I hate seeing my back red coz if any other angel would've seen my back then it could be problem to me because she'd too love scratching my back and that'd then painful for me... lol

So, wanna let me come to bury my face right into your hair???

[Vidya Bacchus]

Looney bin I say Neon lol

[Neon]

As i know about "looney bin" i think it's an institution for mentally ill or insane folks. So would ya love to explain here what does that mean?
(I hope you ain't planning to prove me "MENTAL!" .. HEY, pretty, am not escaped of mental hospital" believe me, am not mental! HAHAHAHAH!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Lol of course not......................:)

[Neon]

Lol thank god!
So, what's looney bin your pretty??

[Neon]

And hey, you didn't reply here either???

[Vidya Bacchus]

What to say friend Neon ?Have lovely christmas:)

[Neon]

Ha! No need to say anything, you pretty Vidya, but wish me every-time so that I could touch the sky.
You too have a very lovely and a very Happy Christmas :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

........................:)

[Scott Metro]

Sweet Surrender....That's cool...why not.
In a thousand years it won't matter who zooms who.
Nice rhythm ...If your willing to fight dragons..I'd say he's getting a damn good deal.

Enjoyed it.
Scott

[Vidya Bacchus]

Why thank you scott:)Yes I think he got a good deal:)