Sometimes we need to appreciate the little things.
The Conundrum of Life Is'nt it ironic, Don't you think? The way people tend to know, The exact solution to your problems, While their life is in ruins at their feet, Apparently they can solve your dilemma, While their's need not be addressed.
Don't you think it's puzzling? How someone is your friend, Until the very second that you need them, When they too cast condemning glances, In your direction without giving you a hearing? Eager to belong , They willingly stab you in the back,
Is'nt it astounding? How lonely you can be, In a crowd of those that love you But who never notice the tears. Storming down your face, Closing their eyes, ignorance is bliss Well they must indeed be ecstatic,
But is'nt it redeeming to see a baby's smile? His laughter the sweetest music, That no musician can compose, His presence a rare treasure, Harboured in your arms, His existence a wonderous thing to behold, In a world where innocence is a needle in a haystack..
I particularly liked the first stanza, mostly because it is the one I most relate to. The people who look down on others for failing to keep their lives under control are often even greater offenders. Umm, you may also want to check over this for the typo of 'Isn't' instead of 'Is'nt', since it is consistently done, I dunno if it was on purpose or not.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you I do have to fix that ,I always put my apostrophe in the wrong place lol
oh, Vid! what a delightful read! those things are certainly ironic, puzzling and astounding. and you are so right! the last stanza is truly the cherry on the cake. don't you wish sometimes your children never grew up? well, minus the diapers, of course.
one thing: did you mean "streaming" down your face instead of "storming"?
great writing Vid!!!
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Sweet Mister Woody thank you for this awesome review.It made me very happy and I did mean "storming".. read moreSweet Mister Woody thank you for this awesome review.It made me very happy and I did mean "storming" :)
I particularly liked the first stanza, mostly because it is the one I most relate to. The people who look down on others for failing to keep their lives under control are often even greater offenders. Umm, you may also want to check over this for the typo of 'Isn't' instead of 'Is'nt', since it is consistently done, I dunno if it was on purpose or not.
Posted 10 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you I do have to fix that ,I always put my apostrophe in the wrong place lol
This is so fantastic, witty, smart, everything. So glad I grabbed it just before bed. BTW read my "armchair quarterback" seems like you and I have similar "friends" :)
The last stanza of this poem is one that could stand alone and it drew me in. There is nothing quite as wonderful as holding a baby in your arms and feeling his hand grasp your finger. Nothing as charming as the cooing and the first toothless smiles. To watch as a child sees his first balloon or first flower and to see the enchantment in his eyes...yes, that is pure innocence and it is quite rare.
The rest of your poem proves you are a wise woman who understands the human condition. Unfortunately, there are far too many who do not understand what a true friend is. When someone you consider a friend does not stand by you in tough times, wound is deep and painful. Other people seem to think they understand exactly what you are going through and their advice is so often off the mark. Yup, that's life....and it certainly is a conundrum. Wonderful work here. Lydi**
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Your words always are so wise and encourage me so much.Thank you Lydi:)
I don't know what to write into the review but i'd love doing this ... have a look
"Claps for you!" You've praise the beauty, the kindness, the truth, the purity of women in your words, you've also expressed here that through how much pain women pass when the men use 'em only for their joys .. you've expressed here how much pain, hurt women got when the men takes 'em there underneath and hurt their body only for their nights.. to make their nights but never realize that what they do is not what women want, women want too making nights but now in that way men's made, not in those ways which they pass through the pain, not in any kinda pressure at all but with the free will, own consent.
Now your this beautiful through-provoking write force me doing writing some thoughts of mine, i hope you'll do agree ... have a look!
1st... A Man wants joy, so does woman
2nd... A Man wants seeing her in his nights, so does woman
3rd... A Man needs making a life better living with a woman, so does woman
4th... A Man needs some hugs from woman to get some relax from his stress, so does woman
5th... A Man hurts her body and spoil her life only for their joy so does she really??????????????????????????????
6th... A Man pushes her onto the bed puts her under his body and brings tears on her beautiful face so does she really???????????????????
7th... A Man locks the door hits onto her face force her to do what she doesn't wanna do ... so, does she really????????????????/
No..never!
As a men've got some fire (as Neon) women've got more fire than men to feel the breathe of love but women never do what a sucking men do ... Men want women so women do but what a women do want men can never understand the clue. Women want relief, safety, peace, smoothness, smile and joy (what 'Neon' gives them) and the bad men want to give them pain, hurt, tears (and that's what "Neon" hates)...
.... For an instance, if angels want "Neon" then "Neon" won't disrespect 'em, if the angels wants 'Neon' to see with them .. then again "Neon" won't ignore them but if Neon wishes seeing them onto his bed at night and use them for the time then "Neon" will smash the mirror standing in front of it because "Neon" is not born to spoil lives of angels but giving them pleasure and that's exactly angels want from "Neon"....
OMG!
Vidya! Please... don't scratch my back!
I know am hot but please don't be wild and hey, please don't fry some chicken on my body!
OMG! Hey! Are ya listening to me??
Please don't pierce your sharp nails into my back and please don't bite my ears so hard!
Hahaha you funny guy.But your words are very wise.Men who treat women badly are evil.You should not .. read moreHahaha you funny guy.But your words are very wise.Men who treat women badly are evil.You should not treat someone like how you would not like to be treated yourself.Very wise words.I will not scrape your back and bite your ears because you have been very sweet so hugs for you!!!
10 Years Ago
Oh S**t!
Crap!
How i can let the chance go from my hands to have your scratches i.. read moreOh S**t!
Crap!
How i can let the chance go from my hands to have your scratches in my back and some bites on my ears??
S**t! I've again missed the chance!
Oh No!
But i don't wanna miss the chance of having some kisses on my both cheeks and on a forehead so, if you want some peace then you can give me your kissses too???
You have exemplified diverging conditions in converging circumstances of life with literary brilliance.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thank you for your wonderful review it is much appreciated:P
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10 Years Ago
Your 1st, 2nd & 3rd stanzas justifies it. I am very sorry, if my statement seems an adulation. It ma.. read moreYour 1st, 2nd & 3rd stanzas justifies it. I am very sorry, if my statement seems an adulation. It may be a symptom of my disease of seeing bigger picture!
Hahah that is funny and your disease sounds not at all terrible ,but very good sense.Thank you again.. read moreHahah that is funny and your disease sounds not at all terrible ,but very good sense.Thank you again:P
10 Years Ago
May be due to my spectacles. haha. Thanks for your reply.:)