Heaven Denied

We all have to face the consequences of our actions

               HEAVEN DENIED
Lilting music cascades its chords,
Over my ever eager soul,
Gossamer silk like  a lover's caress,
Teasing my skin to exquisite pleasure,
Reality straddled  and brought to heel,
Awake,asleep,both or neither ?

 

Heaven opened and I dared a glance,
Like a voyeur in the dark,
Awed to see life's reward,
Splayed before me,
Her treasures my every desire,
As if plucked like a rose from the very depth of my mind,

 

My heart pounds in my chest,
Lest I am found and made to leave,
Musical laughter from cherubic lips,
Tempt me to boldness,
Surely I would be welcome,
If not ,why was I here?

 

"You are here"said a voice laced with knowledge,
Dripping with age"to see what your choices have denied you"
"Your penance ,for decisions you have made,
For people you have hurt,for tears you have wreaked,"
Each softly spoken word,
Like a stake piercing my chest.

 

Her words barely whispered,
Chilling in their finality rendered me mute,
Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,
My actions in life their impact ricocheting into death,
As the gates closed and penance was wrought.

 

 

Author's Note

We must all think about our actions because there are always repercussions

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,"
I do believe in Karma. I have paid for every bad deed I have done in two-fold. The poem is amazing. Should be read by many. Every action good and bad had consequences. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much your words are very appreciated :)

[Neon]

OMG! Vidya... is that really you????

What a great write you wrote, am really made at this piece .. sorry but am about to saving your this write withing few seconds. It's touched my hot heart by your cool words. Yeah! Your right, our actions're what bring our next move in the next upcoming moments ... we've to do before balanced the body, we've to speak before analyzing the words at all because what we do's all about "Repercussions". What a powerful write, pretty. This time am gonna thank you for making this write.
So .. would you mind if I ask for some kisses on your both hands to praise your beauty more???

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much neon and of course the kisses are yours:)

[Neon]

My pleasure as always reading you stunning stuffs.

And thanks for allowing me to kiss your beautiful cold hands to praise your beauty. Thanks, you so nice and kind, Angel ... Thanks for being nice and giving me such a nice pleasure. I know the pleasure's always mine so am thankful to you.

Ah! I can't stay alive without your warm hugs .. OMG! I think i need some more hugs now .. can you give me some more hugs if am not wasting your precious time???

[Vidya Bacchus]

You may have some more hugs!!!

[Neon]

Thanks ...

By the way, Pretty.. what're ya doing right now?
Am really feeling damn bored here, if you don't mind may i take your few time?

[Neon]

Ah! Calm Down! Kalm Down!
Easy you pretty! Don't be freezy!

Ha!

I meant, it's cool now, last night I really hadn't much work to do so I just thought to talk to an angel for a while but I think the angel was busy with the stuff making the world more beautiful by spreading her kind beauty around every-where .. so that she couldn't talk to me.... and It's fair enough I really can understand the responsibilities of an angel.

It's cool now!
Have a beautiful day!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Morning neon:)

[Neon]

Hey, pretty!
Very well Morning!
Thanks for coming to "Neon" with the ray of the first ray of the sun to make "Neon"refresh

So, how was your cold night?
Are you sure you didn't scratch my back with yer long nails in your dreams???

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha you should check and see:)

[Neon]

Ah! Thank God, am saved!
Neah! My back is clean and as "PURE" as before.

Oh! God!
Thank you! You saved me!

But am afraid are you sure you won't gonna jump over my body and not gonna pierce my smooth back with you beautiful sexy hands???

[Neon]

TONIGHT????????/

[Vidya Bacchus]

Funny dear neon :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

a powerful poem with wide imagery , the following lines touched me so deeply
her treasures my every desire
my heart pounds in my chest.
very good
sayed

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much for your kind words,I am most grateful:)

[annabellee]

What a great write.
Fantastic imagery and I love the message you convey here.
well done :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you very much:)

[annabellee]

you are most welcome :)

[Penny]

Yuno... its very much like hw Hindus talk about Karma but more elegant. First half is just brilliant & although i cannot relate to it, it touches my heart. Very nyc..

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you penny that is exactly it karma:)

[Penny]

You're welcum. I hope u keep on amalgamating different things through ur writing beautifully:-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

I will try penny:)

[Penny]

And succeed like u always do.

[Winter Renee Vineyard]

Very beautifully written! Love the message behind the poem......

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much your words mean a lot:)

[funsized fairy]

Very nice, the choice of words is remarkable.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much I normally write pieces that are easier to read but i tried for some more imagery in this one:)

[funsized fairy]

I have yet to have that symbolism in my writing.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You my friend write just fine:)

[funsized fairy]

Why thank you

[Daniel Sala]

Nice poem, took a few reads to appreciate all the ideas in the imagery, the descriptions flow like a gentle breeze turning into a chill wind at the end. Something so hard to do for so many of us: think before you act, the outcome is the horse that thought it was winning which falls at the last hurdle...
Great poem, Vidya, well structured and composed.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you daniel i like it but i was wondering if the meaning was being understood.

[Daniel Sala]

Me too, now you ask that. Explain it to me with apples, please...

[Vidya Bacchus]

I am wondering about how our actions affect us.If we are wicked on earth in death do we expect to be welcomed into heaven with opened arms?Or will we be tortured with the knowledge that heaven is everything that we want but we cannot enter. This is our eternal penance.

[Daniel Sala]

Okay, thanks, I did understand then. Be human: a frequent life cliché - sin lifelong and get frightened in old age and repent, just in case, to avoid what you mention above: to realise one is an impostor knocking at Heaven's door, a "do not pass go" which is only realised at the last hurdle by some humans.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Exactly daniel do not worry i was just as i said experimenting with this much imagery i will thankfully return to more simplier writes because thinking this much hurts my head:)

[Daniel Sala]

Still a great poem.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes thanks my dear friend.

[Laura Harrison]

This is beautiful. Thank you for sharing Vidya :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome my friend:)

[Sami Khalil]

Words of truth and great wisdom. Faith has to be proven by action of the heart and soul as well as the tongue , body and other means or it is a mere charade and hypocrisy . Show me what you believe and don't just tell me...Some people or goverments use faith as a controlling tool or war tool to show they are good and others are evil. A very good poem...:)...............

[Vidya Bacchus]

As ever sami thank you and your words mean a lot:)

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)...................

[Sheila Kline]

Yes indeed! This makes me think of the thought that "what goes around, comes around" and I have seen this come true many times! We must be aware of what our thoughts, our words, our actions may do to another and be wise as to how we act and react!
Your words are ones to embrace and remember! When judgment is given and the gates close, one is left in a very lonely place!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much my dear friend,people so rarely stop to consider the results of their actions.