Heaven Denied

We all have to face the consequences of our actions

               HEAVEN DENIED
Lilting music cascades its chords,
Over my ever eager soul,
Gossamer silk like  a lover's caress,
Teasing my skin to exquisite pleasure,
Reality straddled  and brought to heel,
Awake,asleep,both or neither ?

 

Heaven opened and I dared a glance,
Like a voyeur in the dark,
Awed to see life's reward,
Splayed before me,
Her treasures my every desire,
As if plucked like a rose from the very depth of my mind,

 

My heart pounds in my chest,
Lest I am found and made to leave,
Musical laughter from cherubic lips,
Tempt me to boldness,
Surely I would be welcome,
If not ,why was I here?

 

"You are here"said a voice laced with knowledge,
Dripping with age"to see what your choices have denied you"
"Your penance ,for decisions you have made,
For people you have hurt,for tears you have wreaked,"
Each softly spoken word,
Like a stake piercing my chest.

 

Her words barely whispered,
Chilling in their finality rendered me mute,
Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,
My actions in life their impact ricocheting into death,
As the gates closed and penance was wrought.

 

 

Author's Note

We must all think about our actions because there are always repercussions

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"Judgement had been passed,
And the gavel spoke ,its verdict ordained,"
I do believe in Karma. I have paid for every bad deed I have done in two-fold. The poem is amazing. Should be read by many. Every action good and bad had consequences. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much your words are very appreciated :)

[MsJewel]

You have shared a powerful message in this well written poem. I'm glad I found this one today. It's always a pleasure to read "you".

:) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much Jules :)

[Saddam]

Well written. I surprisingly read it and read it. Lovely poem. Loveya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Ssaad.Luv ya too

[Jack...]

This is so very harsh, but in a good and educating way. Viyda, you have taken me on a journey here, to see the light, hear the music and feel the wrath. And now I sit back and wonder...

Very cool.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Jack.The reality is harsh.Actions have consequences and we need to realize that before we are called to account and we have no case to defend ourselves.

[ZeniaK]

Great write here :D I loved your descriptions of what you thought Heaven would look like, especially in the first stanza. The 2nd, 3rd, 4th lines were my favorite.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much!!!!!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed there is , we must face up to our failings and more importantly be sorry for them, well done.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you I hope we realize our mistakes and repent before we are called to be judged:)

[Frieda P]

Hmmm, sometimes I wonder about karma, this is an intriguing read, I do agree about watching our actions, perhaps it doesn't apply to everyone, seems the evil ones get away with murder, I guess we'll see at the end. Well pen'd Vidya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your words are absolutely true sometimes the evil ones get away but if we believe in an afterlife maybe they do pay for their crimes after all.Thank you so much for your kind review :)

[Frieda P]

I can't say for sure if I believe in a heaven or hell, I hope you're right. My pleasure. Happy New Year by the way. :-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Happy New Years to you too,I hope you have a wonderful day :)

[Rod Dangers]

This moved me and your choice of words and your range of vocabulary really helped tell this story and the way it was presented was spot on. Great piece.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much, your words are very kind although, I seem to have a mild case of writer's block I hope to write something new soon

[Rod Dangers]

Ouch, that sucks. Whenever I have a block I tend to try writing Haiku's as they have a structure and force you to convey as much as possible in very few words. Hope you over come it soon. I enjoy your work.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes i hope i come out of this soon there are words flying around in my head but they same to have no meaning as yet .

[Anand Sehgal]

your use of language is top class.

Lilting music cascades its chords,
Over my ever eager soul,
Gossamer silk like a lover's caress,
Teasing my skin to exquisite pleasure,
Reality straddled and brought to heel,
Awake,asleep,both or neither ?



you started with a bang ! beautiful
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[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Anand your words are as ever appreciated :)

[Anand Sehgal]

how are you? happy holidays :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

I am fine and you my friend how are you ?Happy holidays :D

[Anand Sehgal]

I am spending time being lazy :) :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well then you are living the dream my friend lol.:)

[Anand Sehgal]

:D lolzz ...true

[Vidya Bacchus]

lol.........................:)

[SquinklaPsyOps]

I read it several times, the poem could be about a person that is denied a loved moment that could take her to feel paradise, and when the person is ignored her thoughts arrest her and starts to wonder why the other person was not interested.

I heard that in Heaven, they make them do a lot of work and that they are not all there just looking pretty.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Haha Perhaps the person got away then,thank you for your insightful words:)