My Forever Knight

Knowing you belong with someone and they are all the things you would ever need

          My Forever Knight
Free me oh brave knight,
With the shiniest of swords,
Cut down my enemies with a swipe of your blade,
And with barely a word steal me away,
Upon your swiftest steed,
Away with me you ride.

 

Write me a verse sweet poet,
Say words to me that will never belong to another,
Bring tears to my eyes and kiss them away,
Bury me within your scented embrace,
Like the calmest of seas ,
Let me dance on your shore.

 

Build me a home dear lover,
Where our children's laughter,
Rival that of the greatest symphonies,
Nod your head contentedly ,
With a smile on your face,
As you let  me talk forever about everything and nothing.

 

Now you my brave knight,
Who recites prose and built me a home,
I bask in your reality,
Never worried that your love will falter,
Never happier than in your arms,
Never complete when you are not here.

                                 by vidya

Author's Note

Something different don't know if it is any good so please let me know.

Reviews

[magenta24uk]

I think this seems to show an underlying need to be rescued by our love and kept safe. We all need to feel that love and to Hero worship our chosen partner is no bad thing as long as we except their faults as well. In poetry we can forget the faults and live the fantasy. Nice.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much:)

[Sheila Kline]

It is different, but so very enjoyable as I adore any write of knights, and castles, and the lore and romance of it!!
Your sentiments are perfect as they so eloquently express the adoration one has for the other!!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you dear lady I also love the romance of it all.Thank you as usual for your very kind words:)

[Laura Harrison]

This is so sweet and beautiful. I enjoyed reading this :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Long time no write lol.Thank you very much

[Laura Harrison]

I have been writing, I've just stopped sending read requests because people have been complaining that I send too many lol :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

lol well when you review someone they will review you back so that is nice

[MsJewel]

We all dream of that knight in shining armor to take us away...Your poem is as soft and gentle as a floating in a dream. Beautifully written and a pleasure to read.

:) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much julie your words mean a lot:)

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

I truly like the imagery of the idealized knight of the Age of Chivalry. It is quite sad how most men in real life are more like medieval knights as they truly were for most part, coarse and crass and caring for nothing more than their next piece of tail

[Vidya Bacchus]

Ah my friend that is true but I have actually met my knight so i still try to believe in happy ever after and someone who will be there for you through thick and thin.Thank you so much for your great review

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

Yay! i am glad you have found yours. I feel like there had to be a few truly honorable ones, hence existence of the stereotype . Stereotypes do have a basis in fact, however faint and rare that basis is.

[Daffy]

A very feminine poem, if I may say so. An ideal for when we feel insecure. The way we would love to be in someones care and strength, and to take all our troubles and deal with them for us.....this is the way I read this very important and descriptive write. Whether or not I have it right, I did enjoy it, and envisaged being in that situation. A strong arm around me. A warm feeling. Daffy

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you very much for your kind words.This is something I think we all want someone who will always be there for us:)

[Daffy]

Yes, I agree totally. Lol

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wow! I like this poem a lot. Every woman needs a knight to protect her. I also believe in that. I can relate to this. Nice word choice.
Keep it up!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much your words mean a lot:)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

You're welcome.

[Debra Olivier]

A really nice poem :) and a little bit romantic too.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much i am sadly a hopeless romantic:)

[Debra Olivier]

Same here.

[Neon]

Ha! You naughty wild cat.. But after reading this piece i think am gonna love the name "Knight"

Nice poem, I loved and enjoyed yer first one stanza much, it's too funny. I love hearing when someone as most gorgeous as you write such kinda pieces for a knight alias for Neon .. "(Joke)"

Wonderful write for a knight (for me)
Thanks for giving me such a pleasure of a knight .. My mom always told me since my childhood am a knight of an angel and yeah! Wow! You've proved it that am a knight of an white angel .. "(Laugh with the Joke)"

I enjoyed it. You've a cool talent of writing. Don't give up! Just write!
Keep on!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much neon you are indeed a white knight to me :)

[Neon]

My pleasure! Wow! Am un-concious now to hear the words from an angel .. Thanks you beautiful angel for calling me Knight ..

By the way .. don't ya think, you've forgotten yer warm hugs???

[Vidya Bacchus]

lol. Okay here you go but not too much you might overdose lol

[Neon]

Ha! I never be overdosed because no one wants to die without hugging angels and feelings their warmth .. so, don't you worry, your hugs always work for me as a "Healthy-Health-Dose" and that what I'd love to take everyday, every-time to be healthy and smiley.

So, now what ya say, would ya love to give me overdose or not?

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sure overdose if you please.......

[Neon]

If you please what???
you meant if i please kiss ya at all, is that what you meant???

[Vidya Bacchus]

haha you are such a flirt have a great weekend neon xoxoxo

[Lydia Shutter]

What a wonderful love poem this is....all encompassing. You have described such a wonderful being....someone who writes words for you, builds you a home, gives you children, and always cares for you....someone who protects you from the world. A bit of a Utopian fairy tale character, but so wonderful to dream about. A magical write. Lydi**

[Vidya Bacchus]

Oh thank you very much lydi!The world has changed so much and people no longer believe that love could be like a fairytale becuse people hurt each other so much that you know the devil exists because we see him at work everyday but the angel is seen so rarely that people become so bitter,

[Daniel Sala]

"Write me a verse sweet poet,
Say words to me that will never belong to another,
Bring tears to my eyes and kiss them away,
Bury me within your scented embrace,
Like the calmest of seas ,
Let me dance on your shore."

and

"Build me a home dear lover,
Where our children's laughter,
Rival that of the greatest symphonies,
Nod your head contentedly ,
With a smile on your face,
As you let me talk forever about everything and nothing."

A genuinely beautiful poem with the warmth it exudes, it expresses love and finding the right heart with honest sentiments, and the descriptions of the everyday make it easy to relate to. Words to feel good about, both as reader and as the writer. This poem is a very nice gift for your hubby.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much daniel I am glad you like.

[Daniel Sala]

A pleasure, Vidya, thank you.