The fortress

Hiding never helps you just miss out on the good stuff

                    The Fortress
Tell me the reason you hide behind walls?
Built so high that no one can climb them,
Hidden deep within  a fortress,
Of your own design,
What is your damage ,
That  made your heart cower in fear?

 

Is'nt it lonely  there by yourself?
Could'nt you trust me just a little?
Look into my eyes and grant me an audience,
With the person who though bruised and battered and scared,
Could command my heart,
At his slightest whim.

 

I'll whisper your name,
In the sweetest of voices ,
And plead my case even if the jury is in ,
And dare you not to see me,
Not to feel me in your every breath,
Not to yearn for me in your very soul.

 

I label you a liar if my words you deny,
I curse the day and damn the hour,
You locked me out and condemned us both,
To days with no end ,
Where the rising crescendo of sadness,

Is not a threat but a promise.

Author's Note

I would be very appreciative of your comments

Reviews

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You hold a lot deep inside sharing it in words to seek the wills of comfort, Some do put up walls in life , its very sad but true the world can be a cold damp place, but its up to us to stand strong within it all and walk away with a smile, we smile because the beauty among all things the good the bad the ugly we take it all within and embrace it:) Your a wonderful in depth writer:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You have spoken so wisely and your words are very true thank you for your kind words

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Your very welcome:)

[Praveeta]

Well written poem. I really like the first stanza. Thanks for creating a lovely piece.

[LittleArizona]

To me, and excuse my punn, but this seems as if it is an original more sophisticated version of Wrecking Ball by Miley Cyrus, The reason I say this is because of the emotions you embrace in this piece and the message you embrace in these works!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well I take that as a compliment, I love that song:)

[LittleArizona]

:) Just as long as you are not offended by my comment :) I would not mean to hurt your feelings

[Vidya Bacchus]

Of course not hon thankfully though I just wrote what I felt not what miley did lol:)

[LittleArizona]

Yeah lets not go there lol

[Veronica DiMarco]

might have some painful experience, that's why some put these barriers within themselves.
your writings are so natural and deep.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I thank you so much.Pain makes us put up walls hopefully love will help us tear them down:)

[Veronica DiMarco]

it does, by golly it does! ;]

[Vidya Bacchus]

hahaha it does!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"i have my books, and my poetry to protect me/ i am shielded in my armor, hiding in my room, safe within my womb, i touch no one and no one touches me, I am a Rock"

"i built walls, a fortress deep and mighty that none may penetrate.." (paul simon)

this poem brings me back to that...and to the fortresses i built...

you definitely echo so many of us with these words.

jacob

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you very much for your insightful words we all want to hide sometimes but it would be a waste of life to hide all the time:)

[Neon]

Nice work .. words' nice. You've used here very nice words. Last stanza's cool but i really hate when someone lies with as beautiful as you .. so, if anybody hurts you, then just label them lair ... lol but if they do apologize to you then please un-label then liar as well .. because it'll praise your more beauty as you are so beautiful. Thanks for writing a cool piece. Keep on.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you neon for your very sweet words :)

[Neon]

I don't know why I can't control myself to reply "My Pleasure" when someone as prettiest as you say "Thank you, Neon" ;)

[Judy]

Again - your consistency with the six line stanzas is great - in this piece, among other things, I love the way that you have personified the fortress, and i kept on re-reading it for clarification as to what you were referring to. The last stanza as usual is extraordinary, and had me shaking.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you judy i was thinking about people who have been hurt and build a wall around their heart and won't give love a second chance

[MsJewel]

I admire the depth of your poetry and could feel the emotion in this beautiful poem. You have touched my heart. Wonderful writing.

:) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

Your words mean alot thank you very much.

[BlahBlahBlah]

I don't know how you could ever have felt bad about your poems. You obviously are totally amazing! Keep it up!
And just don't doubt yourself, you rock. I know you do.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you so much yor words mean alot.

[susmitadas]

'I'll whisper your name,
In the sweetest of voices'
These 2 lines took me to my world of beautiful dreams :)
Blessings
Sue

[Vidya Bacchus]

Much thanks sue!!!!