The Jagged Edge

This is about someone who is going through hell but her pride refuses to let her fall.

      The Jagged  Edge              
She  smiles soo bright,
That it dazzles the eye,
She speaks soo much,
There is'nt anything she does'nt say.

 

She cries soo hard ,while eyes are elsewhere,
Because his words that once warmed her,
Now leaves her bitterly cold,
And makes her bleed with their jagged edge.

 

Why is he soo angry?
What did'nt she do?
When did the coin flip,
And his love become tolerance?

 

She'll never let them see,
Her smile is in place,
Her armour against friends ,
That should never be called friends.

 

Her back bears numerous scars,
From the knives they embedded in her skin,
Her skies are crying,always stormy,
Soaking her cheeks crimson.

 

Pride is her only saviour,answering her prayers,
Picking up the pieces and putting them back together,
He is angry again ,his venom spews forth,
Poisoning ,pillaging,he is  terror  defined.

 

 

Where is your haven when your home is your hell?
Where is your oasis in this bone dry existence called life?
When will your children's laughter,instead of their howling cry,
Be your reality instead of a mirage created by a tortured soul?

         vidya

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"She'll never let them see,
Her smile is in place,
Her armour against friends ,
That should never be called friends.



Her back bears numerous scars,
From the knives they embedded in her skin,
Her skies are crying,always stormy,
Soaking her cheeks crimson."

This was so sad and wonderfully written...:)............

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you dear friend sami

[Sami Khalil]

MY pleasure...:)...................

[Chris Rampersad]

Another poem that makes me uncomfortable to read from u. :) Good work.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You do realize brother that not all these are about me right haha thanks:)

[Chris Rampersad]

I know but when i see u and see the nice stuff u does write i does wonder.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are saying my work is great and I am not?I should smack you but then your gears might get damaged lol:)I accept the compliment even if it comes in the guise of an insult haha

[Chris Rampersad]

No i was insulting in d open i doh need to disguise it. hahaha.

[Vidya Bacchus]

hahaha funny :)

[BlahBlahBlah]

Oh my god! Wow! This is so nice! I couldn't select a single phrase to write here because your poem is full of so many nice ones! Really nice!

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you!!!! I am so glad that you like it:)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was just wow. I loved it and it was so well written. xo Winter

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you winter

[Fiona C]

Powerful write Vidya. One can feel her pain.
"Where is your haven when your home is your hell?"
Your home should be your haven, your secure place and when it becomes hell, it is time for change

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you my friend that is true where to feel safe if not home?

[Daniel Sala]

This is a lovely poem, you sum up how life can be, no shelter anywhere, but some somehow keep head held high. To create real/credible characters is a talent I envy.

[Vidya Bacchus]

some people adversary makes them stronger and their pride does'nt let them fall because it is all thay have

[MsJewel]

I could feel the pain and emotion in your words. So many brilliant lines - truly an outstanding poem.

:) Julie

[Vidya Bacchus]

coming from such a wordsmith that is indeed a compliment thank you soo much

[Sheila Kline]

Oh my, your words pierce my spirit as my heart cries for this pour woman! As I read of the horrific abuse inflicted and her spirit of survival and that which has allowed her to endure such anger I wince at the thought of what she has to think of, grasp onto to carry on. The last verse is so strong, as she is strong! What are the answers to these questions when there are none????? She is trapped into what seems to be a living Hell!
A very strong write!!
(just one question, Should the word be soo, or so? Perhaps you are using the double "oo" to emphasize the impact of the deeds.)

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you soo much for your wonderful words and I think the word is soo because there are the two words so and soo now i wonder...Anyways i will find out and i thank you again .It is true i think ,women have to endure alot

[Vidya Bacchus]

yes this word soo though not actually a word in the dictionary is used to emphasize something as in my poem.

[Sheila Kline]

Good, thanks for checking it out!!

[zainul]

Excellent write.
Love these lines most:
"Pride is her only saviour,answering her prayers,
Picking up the pieces and putting them back together,"

[Vidya Bacchus]

I thank you very much for your kind words.I wrote this about my mother's friend who ha s an alcoholic husband and she acts happy even though we see that she talks a lot to hide her sadness.

[zainul]

Thank you Vidya.
I appreciate you for writing such a nice piece.
There is a lesson in this write which is we should try to be happy even if there is some problems in life.

[Vidya Bacchus]

that is very true.Thank you

[zainul]

You are always welcome,my sweet friend.