BROKEN

this is about not seeing what is right in front of you.

                             BROKEN
Your eyes bear a sorrow that is like a cicatrice,
Healed but ever present,
A constant reminder to never forget,
That you have been wounded,
That you have been hurt soo bad that ,
Despair has taken residence in your soul.

I come with no magical cures,
No sacred talisman to hold the pain at bay,
No balm to salve your damage,
I have not even words,
That could soothe with their sweetness,
Or make you think with their logic.

 

It seems soo unfair ,
That you willingly gave your heart to someone ,
Who knew not its value,
Who broke you and laughed,
As the pieces fell through her fingers,
Like soo many shards littering the floor.

 

When I have been here ,
Ever vigilant for the day you would see me,
And claim me as yours,
I have been here to pick up the pieces,
And with the skill of a surgeon sew  them back together,
But I am out of skill to fix you this time.

 

So instead I  will hold your hand,
And sit here voiceless without a remedy,
That will ease your sadness,
Until the day you realize the pain has receded,
Your eyes have cleared,
And you have survived as I knew you would.

 

                                vidya

Reviews

[Neon]

It seems soo unfair,
That you willingly gave your heart to someone ..

These lines're realistic and you can label the Modern Life .. every day even every second our heart beats for someone and when it watches some stunning faces .. it starts bouncing like a Basket Ball .. and the heart becomes a ball and someone stunning face becomes a basket .. and when the ball bounces and hits the basket .. the 'Broken' comes ..

In a short, heart lives into someone's heart and when it completes the goal .. it bounces for an other basket alias for an other heart ...

A thought-provoking poem with the emotions you made. Your cool.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Awww thank you hon for your very kind review

[Neon]

yeah ... when someone as beautiful as you say "thank you hon instead of thank you Neon" .. yeah.. then too, I can't control myself to say "My Pleasure, Pretty!"

[Praveeta]

Well expressed poem relating to matters of the heart. Well done my talented friend.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you Praveeta:)

[Praveeta]

You are welcome.

[Mockingbird]

sometimes the only thing you could do is be there for someone, but most of the time it's enough to ease their pain and know they have a friend to help them get through their ordeal. great job.

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you so much for your kind words

[sonnie ibadah]

wow...so full of emotions, a great reminder of my past experience. so beautifully written.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you sonnie your words men alot:)

[sonnie ibadah]

thank u 4 sharing :)

[Judy]

Nice epistle poetry - and you seem to like the six line stanza consistency - that is good - however, to me this piece bordered on the cliche. I liked the emotion, but the imagery and words seemed common, and not unique.

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you as ever for your honest words they are much appreciated:)

[Anand Sehgal]

So instead I will hold your hand,
And sit here voiceless without a remedy,
That will ease your sadness,
Until the day you realize the pain has receded,
Your eyes have cleared,
And you have survived as I knew you would.

great emotive lines. Loved the write :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you soo much for your kind words my friend

[Anand Sehgal]

you are welcome !

[gladys aily]

I can feel the sadness in this poem. 😔

[Vidya Bacchus]

Thank you my friend

[aleena1805]

Very beautiful, well written, soulful poetry.. And so true! Sometimes all we need is for someone to be there and that is far more soothing than any word or action can ever be. :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you very much.This is true and your words are much appreciated

[Sheila Kline]

We may try to be the cure and at times, expect to be the cure but it is not always possible to have all the answers for another - even one we love so dearly. We don't understand why they are unable to see what we do, or feel as we do. It becomes frustrating, but we can still help -perhaps just by being there as you profess in the last lines of your poem. You have offered, tried, and now can hold the other's hand with knowledge and belief they will survive so you are with them in act and hope!

[Vidya Bacchus]

that is all we can do sometimes.Thank you much dear lady for your kind words.

[FlatLineBeauty]

I really liked this Vidya. It left me stunned. There is nothing I can really say to justify your poem. xo Winter

[Vidya Bacchus]

thank you very much winter