Raw poetry

mme and my buddy just spinning poetry.. ignor all spelling and grammar mistakes. all of this is raw

11:52pmMicah

it really doesn't help pretending it's not there either

I usually end up writing somewhat about it anyways

it gets old sometimes

just the same feelings constantly coming up

11:53pmMe

i usualy end up writing what i dont want to write about then write about whats not bothering me and not getting deep enought so i dont sound like a emo lil f**k

11:54pmMicah

haha

know how you feel dude

11:54pmMe

like im scarred to even admit that im getting deppressed again

or even read my own words

11:54pmMicah

I've been writing some angry lyrics to keep away from feeling stupid about things I've been sad about.

11:54pmMe

alright thats it

we are having and emo lil vent session now!

u start

11:55pmMicah

hahaha

11:55pmMe

u got the first line

go----

11:55pmMicah

d****t, ah s**t. I feel put on the spot

wait

we gotta set out how this is going to go. Idk what's going on ha

11:55pmMe

Me

complete in dissalusion with out i hate all the same heart broken conclusions

you*

go

Feeling complete in dissalusion with out you, i hate all the same broken hearted conclussions of an empty life time

11:56pmMicah

stuck in this sea of regret, mind shattering confusion

damn, your love. Just an illusion

11:57pmMe

bloody fingertips and a lovers slit throat is my resolutions

resolution*

11:59pmMicah

desolate earth, you are my hearts new home. If having a heart makes me hurt this bad, cut it out. Take it, I don't want it anymore. Pain and misery, what are emotions really for?

Today

12:00amMe

To be cut up to be tortured. To remind him that hes alive and that he will always remember. remember! remember he will all ways remember those nights you forgot him in december

12:02amMicah

somehow I wish you could be here. My dear, your face. In my thoughts, my mind. Your presence lingers. Far from you, I feel so distant from myself and all reality. I feel cold and empty, feeling so much pity. Pity for myself

12:05amMe

so pittafull. look at me now. lying on a deathbed ready to die. such a worthless life. they say i dont even try. and they say she cried when she heard. that with one little click. my life was spared from anymmore heartache. from war. from deppression and even competition. so selfish of them. they exppected me to let go when they would never forgive me for letting go completly

12:09amMicah

This is just a blind confession. I'm not here to teach you any lessons. This isn't about you, it's all about me and how I hate to see you here now. Could I make you disappear? Tell me how! Let me forget everything I ever felt for you, there's nothing I want more to do. Just forget about you.

12:13amMe

the myth of reality is but a theory in a world that thrives on blind faith. blind faith is where it started. now im so desperately looking for the next door to run through. and looking for the next door to close. but no matter where i go your always there. there to be missed but never had. there to know that you will never truly be there. and now all i believe is that the theory of scuicidal tendancies can get you through a sleepless night

12:16amMicah

so many things I do just to cope. Forget about you for a moment, then you're brought back to mind in a second. Can you please just wait a second. The way it use to be, the I want it to be. You're killing me now. You may not know how. But with everything I do just to forget, it's another poison that drives me into this pit.

12:19amMe

i hate to think that id never be the same. but when a hole in the heart of girl becomes a million in the heart of a boy. the heart becomes stone. as she heals he will take her pain and all her sufforing and let it cut him down over and over agian untill he doesnt even know himself anymore.

12:22amMicah

the worst part is. I have to hide it to be strong. But tell me you don't think this is wrong! Bitterness, this pain is my death. push me to the edge, girl you've pushed me to the edge. You are increasingly becoming exactly what I wanted to avoid. All my love and compassion, you have destroyed.

12:25amMe

take the heart that used to be real. turn it into the dreams that i hate to become so real. the memories feel like yesterday and i keep wishing theyd happen again tomorrow. even if i had to spend one more day drowing in sorrow. cant you see? youve stollen my smile. youve broken my heart. and youve kept my soul. aphrodite never new a love so cruel. how could it have ever come to this.

12:27amMicah

though I'm hurt and broken. I find myself longing for the love that nearly killed me. I don't understand, I hate you can't you see! What you did to me. I can't forgive, so it's no big deal. But these wounds they never heal. Missing you, for some reason I dont know. Want to cut out my eyes and forget all your lies.

12:32amMe

dont you remember how i fought for you. and i became all your alabis. i became your cruthc. your broken heart. your soul. your see through liltle f**k.see this shallow boy youve reduced him to. you broke his heart with a smile. and you scentenced him to death with out even a trial. so place the nuse around my neck. flick your dagger into my heart. pull the trigger into my temple. because sweet autumn green eyed girl. youve already murdured me somany countless times before

12:35amMicah

pulled me into this lust I never would have found without you. Oh siren, look what you've made me do. Blinded by the twinkle in your eye. Sweet fire on your tongue, made me forget about the deceptive little lie. You stole what you could and threw away the shell. Damn girl, you really know how to put a boy through hell.

12:38amMe

through fire and flames but all i can remember is the water sliding of your body and the steam rising between us. i dont remember the fights. i dont talk about the lies. i only want the good memories. the times we danced under a tree every inch of you i felt ever trembling sound you made as i made you see how much i wanted you. but i can only have both. the side that doenst love me and the side that wants me lesss than i could ever need her

12:41amMicah

You made me scream in anger for this betrayal. why does it seem your still always there, even when you're not. I feel as if the pain and anger keep flooding back. I use this anger to hide the pain, cover up the blackness of my heart in the pouring rain. Maybe it's the sad disappointment of not having what I want, what I think I need. I don't need you, but part of me says I do. What I want is so far away. I'm crawling for it each and every day, but it seems to be crawling away from me. I'm sorry, I'm just so dead without you.

12:45amMe

baby you take me for granted. i wonder what youll think when im not here. when theres no one left to stear, your life away from the headlights. would you ever remember me. is this the question i really want to be. ask-ing. i cant remember the day we parted but i remember the day our passion first started. hun why wont you believe

12:47amMicah

Every time I try, you just leave. Sometimes I wish I had never said those words that were my downfall. Letting you in. Your claws I should have known would sink deep.

12:49amMe

sink deep down within to the part of me thats not so pretty. the part of me that gets high just to forget. that drinks just to remember and the part of me that wears scars to let you know im bleeding without you.

12:49amMicah

well....

that was depressing

12:50amMe

that is going on wc

all of it

im posting it lol

12:50amMicah

well alright do it

12:50amMe

ok then

12:50amMicah

I actually thought of that haha

12:50amMe

blog or poem?

both!!!

haha

12:51amMicah

....

yeah both

12:52amMe

f**k dude

12:53amMicah

what?

12:53amMe

enternet explorer is a b***h

12:53amMicah

haha

this is probably strangely one of the most depressing things we've written... well

idk

but it's long and damn depressing

Author's Note

thanks for reading. what do you think of our raw poetry? all reviews are welcome
micah has a profile on here his name is nitsuacrowdsurfer. heres the link to his wc profile =---- http://www.writerscafe.org/Micah%20Austin check him out hes a really sick writer and has been my friend since birth.

Reviews

[indieRokker]

Driven by emotions, that built into a poem. Wow, Raw emotions huh? What do I think about it? Impressive, creative, relatable. I like how it all flows together. Couldn't have been any better, the title fits it perfectly.
12:19amMe
12:22amMicah
^^ Awesome bit's in the whole poem/convo. It sure is raw, no stopping to think hard, but going straight into it. I loved this. Youse have amazing talent in itself alone. Awesome jam session, I should try this some time (:

Cheers for the read (:
indie♥

[Raven Radke]

Oh wow that was awesome! That was the BEST write I have ever seen in my LIFE! I felt all of it sinking into my heart and I was actually surprised by every word! i Ioved how you guys had the conversation going! Really fanatstic! Great write!

[Comatose]

I liked how you kept the conversation part of this poem, it really helps with bringing emotion and great flow to this. The poem itself is amazing, kudos to you and your friend. :)

[AbsentElements]

That's cool how you started it. It ended up really nice in the end. It's a little strange how two people can make a poem fit together so well with their own emotions, but I have to say it turned out pretty great.

[Lydia]

pretty damn cool guys. it's great to feed off of other poets.. i'd like to join in sometime :P