Perfect

An old poem I wrote in my iPod touch. but i started getting hooked on XO by f.o.b. and i really liked the tune so i took this old poem and wrote lyrics around the outline of the poem.

I'll accept myself,
for who I've been.
Forget what I've done...
And try not to do it again.

It seemed so hard..
To just walk the other way.
But the look you always gave me.
This dream, this faith... maybe even call it love.
You took it ALL away!

I hold onto grains of false hope,
as you easily replace this heart. 
Try to forget and move on from you...

These streets those walks.
Those days those talks...
Yours eyes never seemed so alive..
When mine felt so dead.

God she'd scream like i was the only one for her.
And i love her body, I never found anybody,
That felt, that smelt, that caressed my mind.
No other pleasure like hers that I'll find like hers.

God it's this whole f*****g memory that I can't bare.
It's the sounds you made and all the words you said.
The things we did the things we swore we'd never do.
But Loves promises were meant to be broken anyway!

Don't mention her name, Just let the thought stray.
Think i heard her voice turn and dream the other way.
Hope that the villain she betrayed me for Repays her in kind...
For the chorus of pained sins bleeding at her doorstep.

Live life one breath at a time...
but without her hand: love.
Life's joy's, life's tastes, life's colour has dulled...
I'm just isn't the same.

I'll accept you've gone,
and that you don't want me back.
I hate that I can't let go.
But Hun my feet still work and this pen still writes.

I swear i said that I'd let you go.
I think i can... I think i know.
I think ive figured this out.



                         I've forgivin what iv'e done and what you did to me.
      
                                                        I just hope you can forgive yourself.
  
                                                                                     Goodbye beautiful..


Perfect.

Author's Note

I was reading through my notes and decided to post it.An old poem I wrote in my iPod touch. but i started getting hooked on XO by f.o.b. and i really liked the tune so i took this old old poem and its old emotions and the feeling of regret. shame. abandonment and pain came all rushing back.. so i wrote lyrics around the outline of the poem. What do you think??

Reviews

[AllyKinzz:)]

This is beautiful. I was starting to wonder if you were going to send me some more of your fantastic work. You know how to write, thats obvious, but the way you do it, im a bit jelous, i wish i could come up with the type of things you put into art. Great job.

[Emily Paige]

This is amazing I love the way you write

[Valentine]

Love and loss for each person is often so hard to describe..You did a great job of describing the loss of a lover,,lol and God blerss..Valentien

[Lexi =]]

Great Description.
Good Job(:

[Kristen]

Diction is beautiful, refreshing and new. Good write!

- S.T.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

It was eally god and I loved the line It's the sounds you made and the words you said. Sexy, you're bringing sexy back! Nicely written.

[Jennika has a short att..]

On the eight stanza you said "I'm just isn't the same." I don't know if you intentionally did that, but that's the only thing that caught my eye. It was really good, and I enjoyed reading it. I like that song, and I love the band so of course a very great job because those boys write really awesome lyrics.

[Alisha Martin]

This makes me go back in time. I love it. :)

[AbsentElements]

I can definetly see where it ties with the song in a way. The ending is the best part, but I really enjoyed all of the poem.

[Micah_s5]

Not your best, bust like you said. You wrote this a while back, and your writing wasn't as developed. But it was good, and I liked that you could feel what you were saying. They weren't just fake words that you threw up there for no reason, you put them up because of a strong feeling and a strong emotion and it showed. So good job bro.