Alone act.

felt like i needed to write something.

Beautiful girl... don't look at me.
There are so many more scars.. hidden underneath.
So many that you can't see.
Beautiful girl.. don't even think about me.

Walking home alone... isn't hard enough.
Living in a house with someone you don't know.
When you are by my side...
Hands always would meet.
Oh wonderful girl, just push me into the street.

Always begging to let myself go,
Falling into the unknown.
Tend to broken hearts...
I fear what I've known.

Sit on a lost tire, watching the fire burn away.
Words are never enough.. .
As all of these memories replay.

Face down, into my dreams.
Arms crossed..resting on my knees.
I sit here alone.
Always driving you away.
Oh wonderful, I never have the guts to let you stay.

So pitiful, Faithfully insecure.
Will I always be afraid?

Author's Note

Thanks for reading my poem.. let me know what you think.. all comments and reviews are welcome. i just needed to say what was on my mind. This is me venting. Thank you.
(did some grammatical work. I always appreciate viewers pointing out my
mistakes so I can fix them)

Reviews

[Lunar Lightning]

You dragged me into this one from line one, I usually try to only review one of people's poems, because reviewing more than one tends to just get repetitive and somewhat annoying, because then there is more to go through. But this poem I really enjoyed. You have a certain voice in your poetry that draws people in, me in particular it seems. Though, again, quick grammar lesson (sorry). Only one real suggestion this time though: it should be "Living in a house" not "Living in house". Again, very nicely written, keep writing, I intend to keep reading.

Luna

[Forever Fallen]

This is amazingly good, I can relate to it so much. You did a really good job at having everything make sense but letting it be open enough not to give it away, keep writing, like i said this is amazing.

[OkieWonKenokie]

Very powerful write. I like the lines:

Beautiful girl... don't look at me.
There are so many more scars.. hidden underneath.
So many that you can't see.
Beautiful girl.. don't even think about me.

If you're hurt once, we end up becoming afraid of being hurt again so we don't look for anyone anymore or is just terrified to find someone.

[Valentine]

Once hurt..fear becomes our closet friend..deep but sad write..lol and God bless..valentine

[Pandemonium]

I want to thank you for writing this. It actually meant something to me and made me come in touch with somehting that is going on in my life. And needless to say, it's extremly well written, one of the best poems I've ever read.

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Again, another captivating poem. After reading some of your poems, I really like your style. I love how your emotions just "drip" out of the words and out of the lines. It really makes me feel what your'e writing. You are an excellent writer, and I thank you for sharing your talent with the world! Keep up the awesome work!

Krista

[Jennika has a short att..]

You never cease to amaze me, you are seriously one of the best poets whose work I've read on here. Amazing job.

[Rachael]

I like it, there's kind of a contradiction in you pushing yourself away and the other person doing the same. What I get from it is that you don't really know your place right now, and are just trying to get through anything that's going on in your life.
Well done. venting can make the best poetry!

~Rachael

[AbsentElements]

It's definetly an emotional piece, an emotion often shown but not often put into words as well as you have. Very enjoyable write.

[Millionth Muse]

I enjoyed the feeling and emotion in this piece, it felt very real and very substantial. I also liked the conversational nature of the flow, which was very nice. A couple suggestions--I think you used a few too many elipses (...), and also, remember when you do use them, there are three periods (...) together instead of two (..). Also a few small grammatical issues, like "Living in house with someone you don't know.", should be "Living in (a) house" I think. Overall, nicely done.