Today.

trying to overcome my writeres block

Days like this..
They do not feel.
The 24 hours don't associate with compassion....
With all these mistakes all I can do is deal.
The Minuets have never bled.

Rising and falling..
Torturing you until... surrender.
The scars aren’t mending.
The winds never stop.
Peace never comes.

Keep this wall of mine...
Up, until life knocks me down.
Face down I’ll let you know what I find.
(I just don't understand...)
"How it is someone opens and shuts the door…"

Seconds designed by broken dreams.
The cliché’s are dead.
Trust never knew how to love.
When someone walks away..
It's only harder to say hello...

My Lungs fill with air...
But your finger stop my lips..
One insane day could be forgotten...
If we could just sit for a little while.

Days like this...
You’re so missed...
And I’ll be saying goodbye...

On
a
day
like
this...

Author's Note

Note- this is not my best work. i wrote this when i was trying to overcome my writeres block so please excuse my randomness... it doesnt really flow in my eyes.... but never the less i will accept any criticism and every review. thank you.

Reviews

[Jennika has a short att..]

I'm not really one to review poems but I like this. If you don't think it flows then find the part(s) and write an outline and see which one flows better. I also think you have a spelling error, "Minuets", I believe it's supposed to be "Minutes"? Other than that, I think it was good.

[Emily Paige]

I like this alot great job

[Valentine]

Now this one...writers block or not is put down on the paper perfectly..Good going..lol and God bless kiddo,,Kathie

[Comatose]

Well, I love the way you write when overcoming writers block. It flowed flawlessly, and I loved the raw emotion that was put into this. Very, very, very well written.

[Jacqueline Lopez]

I like the ending in this poem and it's really good.

[Chaos Complex]

I liked it.

"Keep this wall of mine...
Up, until life knocks me down.
Face down I’ll let you know what I find. "

That part stood out for me. Not a bad piece at all. Kudos.

[Raven Radke]

Even tho you might not think it's your best work I still think it's okay..
I understand how you feel on writers block very annoying! But very good right tho!

[Micah_s5]

"When someone walks away..
It's only harder to say hello.."

A line so true.

[AllyKinzz:)]

its really good actually, i think it flows, but not greatly. You have one spelling error, "new" i think you meant "knew" in the line "trust never new how to love".

But in all its a good piece. Good job. :D

[Taylor H.]

now that your out of writersblock why dont you try and fix it :) its interesting but I know you could fix it