Damaged

an old poem i decided to post.

Do you know why i put holes in the wall?
Why do i doubt that you wouldn't let me fall?

Can you hear me screaming,
tearing the room all apart?

You made him feel like he wasn't good enough from the damned very start.

He'll always!!
Forever!!!
always played for second best.
But hell honey don't stop now,
I'll forgive all the rest.

Shaping him masochistically.
He smokes just to deal,
with all the stress.

When will your lies stop.
Will the Truth always hurt this bad.
I'm lying on the floor, but hell honey don't stop.
This heart couldn't go through anything less.

Author's Note

an old poem i added allot too

Reviews

[Chaos Complex]

Good stuff. I feel some angst, and I (unfortunately) can relate to the smoking part and the dealing with stress. Thanks for sharing.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

wow this is really good .... i love it

[Raven Radke]

see the smile that's put across my face? :) it takes a lot just to do that! 100% all the way!

[AllyKinzz:)]

WOW! Tough, i like it though! Very strong in the emotional side.

[Taylor H.]

I agree with the other reviews. I can sense the bitterness as well. great job, great poem. Keep up the great work

[Aradie Rain]

Definatly a feeling of bitterness I agree. Sadness as well as feeling that your not telling us everything.
~Aradie

[Micah_s5]

This one gives off a real feeling of bitterness pretty well. Pretty good one.