Silhouette

i always light a candle before i sleep and when i put it out i seem to fall asleep immediately

slowly burning candle.
Flicker in and out,
the light keeping me alive.

Missing the one i think of,
The falling star i dream of.
Flicker in and out.

Eyes wide open.
Relentlessly Haunting my sleep,
My star, she flickers in and out.

Keep my face smothered into my pillow,
Shadows guarding me,
My falling silhouettes.
those dreams flicker in and out.

My Eyes are heavy,
silhouetting candle flickers in and out,
as she falls cold into my arms.

Believing this isn't,
just another dream...
The candle flickers in and out.

Author's Note

thanks for all your reviews and ratings. all criticism is welcome. i know this isnt my best but thanks anyway

Reviews

[Comatose]

I love this....the imagery is amazing- good job. :)

[Lilly]

this is very good - very beautiful - i love the flow of this piece and the repitition of '...flickers in and out' - it really tied the whole thing together. great work

[Micah_s5]

definitely a good piece

[Raven Radke]

Very mysterious!
I absolutely enjoyed this!

[Impulse]

Sorta has a mysterious feel to it. I love it. Thanks for sharing =]

[AllyKinzz:)]

Not one of your greatest, but one of your best. :D

Your just a good poet, :D i enjoy reading your poems, :D

[Aradie Rain]

I believe this is one of your best that I have read. Sometimes the ones we dont think are really are. Very good, keep up this awesome work

[Taylor H.]

amazing