The rock screams. (thinking rock extended)

allot of you said you wanted more from "thinking rock" and that you said it felt unfinished. so i started thinking so too. here it is.. thinking rock extended aka the rock screams.

Remember remember the risks I took.
(idiot, useless, You are nothing)
Blood stained hands, the guilt never looks.
Remember remember the fate of those you loved.
(never trust another, love is just an excuse!)

Hate, how you held back all of your affection.
Completely disgusted with my own reflection.
(you meant nothing to her!)
I'm just another useless affliction.
Fading clouds, the sun disappearing,
with all my dreams.
(and all of your trust)

Remember remember,
the cold nights in December.
(shallow boy, your a useless memory)
Scars on the horizon.
Tears bleed from my addictions.
Can anyone possibly save me?
(the rock screams no..)
Crawl back to God or Burn standing up.
(he's turned his back on you, I'm all alone)

I'm on my knees..
(pretty pretty please?your Worthless.)
Someone save me.
But He doesn't answer.
(just another unanswered prayer? shocking..)

I want to believe so badly..
That there's truly still more love than hate.
But i cant feel my own heart beating.
(you have none, you gave it away)

How could I of been so wrong?
Could this truly have been so fake all along?
(yes)
Places of Of nothing and nowhere.

(your everything you hate)
Everything feels so shallow and fake.
(you know your fate)
Feeling these words,
(The rock screams)
And I begin to break.

Author's Note

this is the new version of thinking rock..
i hope you all like it!!

Reviews

[Moth Phoenix]

I liked it a lot. =]
Awesome.

[Comatose]

Wow...this is by far my favorite of yours. Amazing work!

[Micah_s5]

Like it. Now it feels complete.

[Micah_s5]

Hmm, yeah. I would have to agree that with some other people when they say they think it should be longer. It was good, but felt almost unfinished.

[An Ordinary Woman]

Desperation and hope. I took a little bit of each with me when I read your poem. I like it. It is good. I like the notion of a thinking rock. Mine is my car, taking a road trip. I do lots of thining then. My best to ya...

[Taylor H.]

I liked it. I thought it ended to soon and that maybe it could be a little longer, but i liked it. Good job.

[AllyKinzz:)]

This is....briliant, so truth filled, and honest. I like how you asked questions. I want to read more, but its cut off. Your mind is....very....like mine, but with yours, sorry but i must say, i want to read more. :D

Keep up the good work. :D

[ZmH]

i like your descriptions. your captured the pain very well. good write

[Chaos Complex]

Some nice rhyming in this poem. Pretty deep stuff. Being confused and lost sucks, and getting back up can be painful at first- but if you keep pushing you'll find your way. Thanks for sharing.

[Aradie Rain]

Love vs Hate, It is somthing that we all question as our life progresses. I remember I used to, and still do somtimes ask these questions. Dont worry, You'll find love again; It comes when your ready, and your not looking :)
~Aradie