Love Poem

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What do I love about you?

You care
You understand
You know me
More than I'd ever let you
You see me
Much more than I show you

You touch me
With words and thoughts
Though I've never felt your skin
I connect with you

It's electric
What you and i have

You make me feel special
Even when I don't think much of myself
You just appreciate me
And whatever I have to offer

You are simple
Yet at times complex
You are honest
And I believe what you say is true

You love me
Even when at times I don't deserve to be loved

You are you
And to me it's more than enough

Reviews

[DRIVEN]

very sweet poem, thanks for sharing this

[Emily Rose]

A very sweet sentiment. You've got one "i" that needs to be capitalized, though (What you and i have). The line breaks confuse me a little too, sometimes; they seem a bit random. I like the comparison of love to electricity, but that seems to be the only concrete metaphor in the poem. Can it be expanded at all? What you have here is a collection of abstract thoughts and ideas, but that collection is rather general and there's nothing to make it real to your readers. Try expanding on your images and making them a more intregal part of the poem - it'll help it to stick better in the reader's mind and really get across what you're trying to say. Keep writing!

[emz]

What a beautiful poem, so heartfelt and warm and tender i could go on.....
I love the flow and your words are threaded with sweetness and innocence

I loved this


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