Final Words

Final Words

A Poem by Vanessa P
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007002008 written while listening to Evanescence "My last breath"

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This is my last goodbye
My failed attempt at life
Find me in an empty corner
As I gasp for one last breathe

My cries muffled, silence
Lips sealed with stitches
My eyes blinded
The darkness taking over me

No one will collect my remains
I will continue to decay
And death will be in vain
No dignity remained

© 2008 Vanessa P


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Dark and foreboding. In three stanzas you create the makings of a whole story and I found as I was reading I wanted to know more, to know what had happened, why it had happened and what could have occurred to justify the utter despair at the end. The imagery is powerful. Loved stitched lips, empty corner, darkness coming and the hauntingly beautiful loneliness of knowing not only that we die alone but, in this case, that no one will be coming for our stuff. I love the taste of salt in a wound. :-D

Posted 16 Years Ago


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Dark and foreboding. In three stanzas you create the makings of a whole story and I found as I was reading I wanted to know more, to know what had happened, why it had happened and what could have occurred to justify the utter despair at the end. The imagery is powerful. Loved stitched lips, empty corner, darkness coming and the hauntingly beautiful loneliness of knowing not only that we die alone but, in this case, that no one will be coming for our stuff. I love the taste of salt in a wound. :-D

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Vanessa P
Vanessa P

Heights, NY



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I'd like to consider myself an honest poet. I write what comes to me. I write based on personal experiences and/or feelings and also some personal beliefs. I appreciate all feedbacks/cricism. .. more..

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